tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post1512947276171249172..comments2023-10-10T10:13:23.885-05:00Comments on Writing in the Bachs: ShadormaOther Maryhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-27136888094682899702011-04-13T07:11:01.150-05:002011-04-13T07:11:01.150-05:00Lorenzo - thank you for you comment, I like the en...Lorenzo - thank you for you comment, I like the end too.Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-76468083293567012612011-04-12T17:01:04.240-05:002011-04-12T17:01:04.240-05:00Well done. Like other commenters, I like the unexp...Well done. Like other commenters, I like the unexpected ambivalent end, the waiting on the move, towards what?Lorenzo — Alchemist's Pillowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07522265816460154722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-26358619822831304502011-04-12T12:29:25.039-05:002011-04-12T12:29:25.039-05:00Hey, thanks JL&B! Even though I mixed up the ...Hey, thanks JL&B! Even though I mixed up the last 2 lines, lol. <br /><br />Thank you BKM!Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-68236373294283191032011-04-11T21:46:43.546-05:002011-04-11T21:46:43.546-05:00love the twist at the end...you becoming the waiti...love the twist at the end...you becoming the waiting...the obsession taking over self...bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-21866354277257214762011-04-11T21:06:13.581-05:002011-04-11T21:06:13.581-05:00Hi Mary
came by from OSP... Love the poem, you mad...Hi Mary<br />came by from OSP... Love the poem, you made the form look easy !<br />JL&BJL Dodgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12713220952100680871noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-57026127944366398972011-04-11T21:01:51.524-05:002011-04-11T21:01:51.524-05:00Jingle - thanks!
Helena - thank you - and thanks ...Jingle - thanks!<br /><br />Helena - thank you - and thanks for following :o)Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-43249005869441397762011-04-11T19:14:40.947-05:002011-04-11T19:14:40.947-05:00My first visit...smiles...
♥ ஆMy first visit...smiles...<br /><br />♥ ஆHelena Whitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03022290127423654311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-49089248524298997342011-04-11T18:22:55.704-05:002011-04-11T18:22:55.704-05:00glad to see you back with smiles.
very well fine ...glad to see you back with smiles.<br /><br />very well fine tuned piece.<br />you rock.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-79136798572062184422011-04-11T15:56:09.715-05:002011-04-11T15:56:09.715-05:00Thanks Brian! Even though the syllable count is w...Thanks Brian! Even though the syllable count is wrong I think I like it this way better, so I'll try another go at the shadorma form.Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-11727951793013896792011-04-11T12:50:00.382-05:002011-04-11T12:50:00.382-05:00oh wow...this is haunting and real...yikesoh wow...this is haunting and real...yikesBrian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-67113638959436162002011-04-11T12:01:53.132-05:002011-04-11T12:01:53.132-05:00Oh, thank you Reflections :o)Oh, thank you Reflections :o)Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-48602001569095144252011-04-11T10:35:38.647-05:002011-04-11T10:35:38.647-05:00I think your Muse is listening to your temptations...I think your Muse is listening to your temptations. Wonderful write.Reflectionshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09655163868990155242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-59579111316893556382011-04-11T09:42:30.391-05:002011-04-11T09:42:30.391-05:00Thanks hp and Ainsley.
Annie - I tend to be a bit ...Thanks hp and Ainsley.<br />Annie - I tend to be a bit lysdexic with numbers, I switched the order of the lines on the page where I wrote this...oops! Thanks for pointing it out, I wouldn't have noticed.Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-88825759899029910942011-04-11T09:36:28.040-05:002011-04-11T09:36:28.040-05:00Your Muse is home again - beautifully written Mary...Your Muse is home again - beautifully written Mary ♥Ainsleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09517497340893443306noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-621662569565579982011-04-11T09:33:12.354-05:002011-04-11T09:33:12.354-05:00Mary...I love the line "I have become the wai...Mary...I love the line "I have become the waiting" just one thing...that is 7 syllables...if you switch line 5 and 6 you will have the shadorma form nailed!<br /><br />Counting time<br />on the calendar<br />each day is<br />agony<br />I have become the waiting<br />moving towards what?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-859401242211888920.post-70427774967357847872011-04-11T09:24:58.164-05:002011-04-11T09:24:58.164-05:00I like the turn at the end...always a useful tool ...I like the turn at the end...always a useful tool in succinct writing<br /><br />Peace, hpknot eyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14238403848734436106noreply@blogger.com