Yell Sound, Shetland by R. A. D. Stainforth
Climb
aboard!
We
sail away today,
over
oceans deep and wild and wide,
out,
and out, league after league toward the horizon
under
endless slate grey skies, rain-kissed,
cloud-tumbled,
sun-pierced or
star-riddled.
And
all we know recedes,
all
the firm, green predictable things
recede
as we traverse over oceans toward
the
strange terrain of dream and fable.
Unknown
wonders await;
climb
aboard!
The picture is complements of Magpie Tales. The form is from Imaginary Garden w/ Real Toads. In its simplest form, the Triquain consists of seven
lines, with syllables counted in multiples of 3.
3 - 6 - 9 - 12 - 9 - 6 - 3
The trick thereafter
is in deciding how many of these stanzas you want to use. There are several described, and I chose one called Triquain
Swirl. This is created by joining the stanzas together on the seventh line,
eliminating the second 3 syllable line and the space between stanzas. The
finished stanza will stand at 13 lines and may be repeated thereafter.
3
- 6 - 9 - 12 - 9 - 6 - 3 - 6 - 9 - 12 - 9 - 6 - 3
Also, one can include an element
of repetition in the Swirl by taking a 3 syllable word or
phrase from one of the longer lines and using it as the final 3 syllable line
of the stanza or at the bridge of the swirl.
And like Helen's, Your form is also Perfect!
ReplyDeleteI've missed your talented ways Mary Bach.....G
Well, I haven't said this in a while but.....YAHTZEE!!!!!
ReplyDeleteGalen!!!! Hey I have missed you too! ALLONS Y!
ReplyDeleteOh this one was a cheerful one.. really enjoyed the dancing on the waves :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Bjorn. Now I want to go on a trip!
ReplyDeleteDream & Fable ahoy!
ReplyDeleteALOHA from Honolulu
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Thank you Cloudia...I love to sail to Hawaii one day!
DeleteSure, I would love to, smiles ~ How I wish to escape from the endless grey slate sky ~
ReplyDeleteExactly! :o)
DeleteIn a word, brilliant...
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Berowne!
DeleteNever know where the sea will lead, aboard we climb
ReplyDeleteRight - we need a cat on board Pat!
DeleteAnd all we know recedes... WONDERFUL! Love and Light, S
ReplyDeleteThis is great and I am ready to come aboard!!
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like a wonderful adventure!!
ReplyDeleteSounds like a great trip to me - quite an adventure and it read beautifully, Mary.
ReplyDeleteI was very interested in the technical explanation of how you wrote it - but alas a little over my head - it just read so nicely to me. Glad you are back ~ Eddie
Skipping the waters can be most tempting. Like it Other Mary!
ReplyDeleteHank
love this wander-lust for the dream-land...nice play on the form too :)
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful, Mary. Your choice of subject id perfect for the form, and the wave-like effect on the page. Your lines flow so effortlessly along and great choice of 'star-riddled' for the bridging word. That is so descriptive.
ReplyDeleteThis is like a calling to all alive to truly live....beautiful Mary!
ReplyDeleteA call to adventure! Beautifully penned. Lovely imagery. :)
ReplyDeleteWomen travel this sea so effortlessly , for men , more often than not , only when the ship sinks unexpectedly ...lament
ReplyDeleteI love, "the firm, green predictable things recede". That says it all for me. To be out on the water with nothing predictable on the horizon. Scary yet exhilarating.
ReplyDeleteThanks everyone. I've visited all you and read your responses, even though I fell behind answering your comments here. I really do appreciate your visits and comments though. Happy writing to you all!
ReplyDeleteSounds like a wonderful adventure ..I'm onboard!
ReplyDeleteDream and fable...oh yes...I'm coming too...
ReplyDeleteIt sounds wonderful! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks you ladies! Welcome aboard!
ReplyDeleteI generally suck at those form kinds of verse, but you rock it, Other Mary!!
ReplyDeleteSo, an Alaskan cruise? Mediterreanean? (or however you spell that.) And we have an awesome suite with a grand balcony on the ship, right?? With room service for breakfast, if desired!! Setting a course for adventure.... :)
xoox
Hey Jannie! And you're the guest of honor - you betcha! Thanks so much, it's good to 'see' you again.
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