Sunday, July 26, 2015

Dylanw

    Photo by Tess Kincaid: Merchant Seafarers' War Memorial, Cardiff

Where
are we?
blinded and
betrayed by time,
endless skies press down
with the weight of water.
Sanded and salted, preserved,
we thought, like a pearl of great price
lamented but unfound and scattered
so my ribs no longer know each other.



Over at the Imaginary Garden Margaret asked us to "play it again" with a previous prompt. I chose a form called an Etheree, an unrhymed syllable counting form, beginning with a first line of one syllable, and continue for ten lines increasing the syllable count by one each line, as follows: 1/2/3/4/5/6/7/8/9/10.  The image is from Tess Kincaid at Magpie Tales and is also posted there.  Please follow the links to both of these outstanding writing sites.

22 comments:

  1. Yes, perfect blend of these two prompts. Nicely done!

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  2. I can feel the weight of both skies and water. Really tight write.

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  3. Oh, I love the sanded and salted~ Your ending really brings the weight to life~ Well Done

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  4. A moving interpretation of the picture and excellent use of the etheree.

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  5. lamented but unfound and scattered
    so my ribs no longer know each other"...... absolutely lovely.

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  6. An excellent response to the prompt :D
    Beautifully executed :D

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  7. "Sanded and salted, preserved"...i like the expectation and feeling in this...

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  8. Lovely write. Favorite line: "Sanded and salted, preserved".

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  9. preserved with sand in not so fun places? lol

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  10. Every word counts in this dark picture you paint.

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  11. Your closing!! I love this focus and form, Mary!

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  12. Beautifully written , IronBorn

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  13. " preserved,
    we thought, like a pearl of great price"

    Ah, there's the rub. That image ... so many soldiers - MIA, etc., beneath heavy skies, waters.... You say so much with so little. Excellent, as usual.

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  14. Lovely form; the progression adds suspense to the question, to the need to know...

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  15. Very nice...and I like the form too...

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  16. effortless form, and that clincher line... ~

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  17. only the earth knows all the locations of his once powerful body

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