Wednesday, September 21, 2011

The Snake Charmer


Wind's soft yawn
rustles tall grass
tickles Catalpa leaves

River slows
sways
in her race to the
ocean

Sentinel moon
hangs heavy
host-like
in the thick, velvet sky

Licorice whip snakes
eyes dull
entranced with opiate music
of the goddess
rise  

This was written for Magpie Tales which gives a weekly pictorial writing prompt, this week Rousseau's The Snake Charmer, and Three Word Wednesday which this week challenged writers with the words yawn, dull and race.  

28 comments:

  1. Certaintly wasn't yawn
    Here at your lawn
    As the flute playing wasn't dull at all
    Just don't race the snake down your hall
    Look I used each one
    Now I've had my fun

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  2. Pat - Thanks for the rhyme, stop by any time!

    Sheilagh - Thanks for the kind words!

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  3. your poem is actually seductive in a soothing way.

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  4. I enjoyed the subtle melodic flow of this poem. wonderful use of the words. The picture does well to capture the feel also. Thank you for sharing it with me.

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  5. Oh, I like this, Mary. Very nice.
    — K

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  6. Sentinel moon is very cool, as is 'host-like' which echoes ghost-like but makes me think of communion wafers--and the dull eyed snakes are perfect...hypnotized. Very murmuring,mesmeric feel.

    PS Moonwitch is my even older sister. ;_)Or was that Sandwitch...'kay. I'm outta here.

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  7. This is a lovely reworking of the painting in words,

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  8. 'Licorice whip snakes'..lovely phrase..almost delicious..although snakes not so yummy..good to read you again too..Jae

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  9. This is hypnotic and lyrical ... loved it!!

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  10. You certainly painted this most beautifully with your carefully chosen words...

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  11. lakefront has a beer
    that actually tastes quite good
    called the snake charmer


    or something similar. it might be called snake chaser, but it's damn good. it's a st. paddy's day thing.

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  12. Hello! My first visit, will visit you again. Seriously, I thoroughly enjoyed your posts. Congrats for your work. If you wish to follow back that would be great I'm at http://nelsonsouzza.blogspot.com
    Thanks for sharing!

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  13. Nelson - Thanks for the comment, I'll have a look at your blog.

    Anon - Yum

    Rob - Thank you Rob.

    Cello Strings - Thanks, glad to have the opportunity.

    Jinksy - Ty, and I feel like I need to do more next time.

    Suz - Thank you!

    Helen - Thanks - always nice to 'see' you.

    Jaerose - Ty. lol, not a snake fan eh?

    Anna - I appreciate it.

    Strummed W - Thanks

    Eric - Hey, thanks for that!

    Dr. FTSE - Thank you Doc.

    Hedgewitch - Thanks, I guess we are both moon girls. Too funny about the witch family tree. lol, I'm getting confused about which witch is which!

    Kay - Thank you so much!

    Robert - I'm glad you 'stopped by' - thank you for your kind words.

    Shauna - Thanks for the read and the comment. I Appreciate it.

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  14. Poem and painting fit well together. An excellent response to the prompt.

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  15. Yeah, clever stuff!

    I like the bit about the licorice whip snakes.

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  16. Very seductive, reminiscent of the allure of the charmer's guile. If read with a metaphorical eye, it becomes a cautionary tale. Beautiful work.

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  17. Eclipsingwinter - Thank you so much.

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  18. incredible.

    Jingle Poetry has moved to the gooseberry garden, where we do poetry picnic, we valued your support in the past.

    you are welcome to join our week 7 poetry picnic, starting Sunday, 8pm.

    week 7 theme: love and love lost.

    a random or old poem is welcome too!

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  19. Gooseberry Garden - Thank you! I'll take a look. I'm in a bit of a writing slump right now, but may your prompt will help.

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