Wind's soft yawn
rustles tall grass
tickles Catalpa leaves
River slows
sways
in her race to the
ocean
Sentinel moon
hangs heavy
host-like
in the thick, velvet sky
Licorice whip snakes
eyes dull
entranced with opiate music
of the goddess
rise
This was written for Magpie Tales which gives a weekly pictorial writing prompt, this week Rousseau's The Snake Charmer, and Three Word Wednesday which this week challenged writers with the words yawn, dull and race.
Certaintly wasn't yawn
ReplyDeleteHere at your lawn
As the flute playing wasn't dull at all
Just don't race the snake down your hall
Look I used each one
Now I've had my fun
love the imagery.
ReplyDeletePat - Thanks for the rhyme, stop by any time!
ReplyDeleteSheilagh - Thanks for the kind words!
your poem is actually seductive in a soothing way.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the subtle melodic flow of this poem. wonderful use of the words. The picture does well to capture the feel also. Thank you for sharing it with me.
ReplyDeleteOh, I like this, Mary. Very nice.
ReplyDelete— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
Sentinel moon is very cool, as is 'host-like' which echoes ghost-like but makes me think of communion wafers--and the dull eyed snakes are perfect...hypnotized. Very murmuring,mesmeric feel.
ReplyDeletePS Moonwitch is my even older sister. ;_)Or was that Sandwitch...'kay. I'm outta here.
This is a lovely reworking of the painting in words,
ReplyDeleteLoved "Licorice whip snakes" Mary!
ReplyDeleteNice take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteA beautiful interpretation.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
'Licorice whip snakes'..lovely phrase..almost delicious..although snakes not so yummy..good to read you again too..Jae
ReplyDeleteThis is hypnotic and lyrical ... loved it!!
ReplyDeletefull of lushness
ReplyDeletenice
You certainly painted this most beautifully with your carefully chosen words...
ReplyDeleteyour words linger.
ReplyDeletethanks for sharing.
Very dreamy -- nice Mary... ;)
ReplyDeletelakefront has a beer
ReplyDeletethat actually tastes quite good
called the snake charmer
or something similar. it might be called snake chaser, but it's damn good. it's a st. paddy's day thing.
Nelson - Thanks for the comment, I'll have a look at your blog.
ReplyDeleteAnon - Yum
Rob - Thank you Rob.
Cello Strings - Thanks, glad to have the opportunity.
Jinksy - Ty, and I feel like I need to do more next time.
Suz - Thank you!
Helen - Thanks - always nice to 'see' you.
Jaerose - Ty. lol, not a snake fan eh?
Anna - I appreciate it.
Strummed W - Thanks
Eric - Hey, thanks for that!
Dr. FTSE - Thank you Doc.
Hedgewitch - Thanks, I guess we are both moon girls. Too funny about the witch family tree. lol, I'm getting confused about which witch is which!
Kay - Thank you so much!
Robert - I'm glad you 'stopped by' - thank you for your kind words.
Shauna - Thanks for the read and the comment. I Appreciate it.
Poem and painting fit well together. An excellent response to the prompt.
ReplyDeleteDave - Thank you sir.
ReplyDeleteYeah, clever stuff!
ReplyDeleteI like the bit about the licorice whip snakes.
Andy - Thanks much.
ReplyDeleteVery seductive, reminiscent of the allure of the charmer's guile. If read with a metaphorical eye, it becomes a cautionary tale. Beautiful work.
ReplyDeleteEclipsingwinter - Thank you so much.
ReplyDeleteincredible.
ReplyDeleteJingle Poetry has moved to the gooseberry garden, where we do poetry picnic, we valued your support in the past.
you are welcome to join our week 7 poetry picnic, starting Sunday, 8pm.
week 7 theme: love and love lost.
a random or old poem is welcome too!
Gooseberry Garden - Thank you! I'll take a look. I'm in a bit of a writing slump right now, but may your prompt will help.
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