Friday, March 9, 2012

He Said - She Said


Every poison conversation
turns on your tongue, twists in my back;
becomes a cross-examination.

Every poison conversation
degenerates to accusation;
too much pressure makes us crack.

Every poison conversation
turns on my tongue, twists in your back.

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This is a Triolet for dVerse where they are in good form at the pub.  Check it out for informationby Sam Peralta on the Triolet form.
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33 comments:

  1. Brian MillerMarch 9, 2012 at 5:36 PM

    nice...you did well to the form...i def like that B line...and how true on those conversations....

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  2. Mary B. MansfieldMarch 9, 2012 at 5:51 PM

    I really like this. I think I've had a few of those conversations lately.

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    1. Other MaryMarch 10, 2012 at 6:51 AM

      Thanks Mary, and sorry to hear you can relate! This isn't a recent occurrence for me, fortunately.

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  3. SemaphoreMarch 9, 2012 at 5:55 PM

    The repetitions in the triolet serve to underline how poisonous those conversations are. Well-crafted.

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  4. Pat HattMarch 9, 2012 at 6:08 PM

    With all that poision at least one should be toast before the final twist or your wrist.

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  5. author.nara.maloneMarch 9, 2012 at 6:08 PM

    Love this line: turns on your tongue, twists in my back;

    Words can cut in just that way.

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    1. Other MaryMarch 10, 2012 at 7:58 AM

      Thank you Nara. Yes, words can have so many uses!

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  6. BeachannyMarch 9, 2012 at 8:06 PM

    Agree with Sam. This is clever, well crafted, and well thought through. The switch in the end was excellent.

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  7. LydiaMarch 10, 2012 at 3:07 AM

    Your blog has such a beautiful feel and sense to it. And I think your triolet is more than impressive. It would be marvelous used in materials against bullying in schools.

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    1. Other MaryMarch 10, 2012 at 8:08 AM

      Thank you very much Lydia! I appreciate your kind words.

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  8. WanderMarch 10, 2012 at 4:06 AM

    This is a very good poem Mary!
    You asked if I was a fan of Tolkien...oh yes I am. I have read the lord of the rings atleast a ten or fifteen times, as well as a couple thousand other books.

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    1. Other MaryMarch 10, 2012 at 8:10 AM

      Thanks, and a pretty good guess, from your blog name. I think JRRT rocks too :o)

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  9. SueMarch 10, 2012 at 6:09 AM

    Oh my, this is brilliant - many years ago I was in a relationship with a very verbally manipulative person..the first 2 stanzas of this triolet sent shivers down my spine.

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    1. Other MaryMarch 10, 2012 at 8:34 AM

      Thank you Sue. Sorry you can relate, but I'm glad to hear it's a thing of the past.

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  10. MaryMarch 10, 2012 at 6:51 AM

    Excellent! I have known people like this too, Mary! Nice triolet.

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  11. Beth WinterMarch 10, 2012 at 9:52 AM

    Gossip is such a vicious poison. Wonderful work!

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  12. ClaudiaMarch 10, 2012 at 12:44 PM

    ah those poison conversation do just nothing good....excellently penned and a really good use of the form as well mary

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    1. Other MaryMarch 10, 2012 at 10:16 PM

      Thank you Claudia, you're so right about the conversations!

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  13. Maude LynnMarch 10, 2012 at 3:48 PM

    Awesome job with the form!

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  14. EllaMarch 12, 2012 at 10:50 AM

    Wow Mary, this was amazing!

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  15. Other MaryMarch 12, 2012 at 6:32 PM

    Thank you Ella :o)

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  16. Sherry Blue SkyMarch 14, 2012 at 11:37 AM

    Powerful poem, and a good message - the bearer of such toxins is the one who ultimately pays. Great write.

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    1. Other MaryMarch 14, 2012 at 2:14 PM

      Thank you Sherry - I haven't been very active in blogland this week. Thanks for checking in!

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  17. ayalaMarch 14, 2012 at 4:13 PM

    Mary, this is clever and excellent !

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  18. Other MaryMarch 15, 2012 at 7:55 AM

    Thanks Ayala!

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  19. joannaMarch 21, 2012 at 9:19 PM

    oooh... so much truth in these little lines.

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  20. Other MaryMarch 25, 2012 at 12:04 AM

    Thanks Joanna; unfortunately yes.

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