Friday, June 15, 2012

Nightmare for Toads



Night time:
urgent squeaking,
naked tail flicks, thrashes,
whisker-twitch, nail-click down the clock -
huge, grey-haired body bullets toward me,
its echo follows close behind.
I tense, then roll over
toward birdsong
morning.




This is a post about a nightmare and its resolution for IGRT.  I don't often have nightmares, but being the good little toad that I am, I had a delightfully creepy one last night about rats.  I think woke to find that the squeaking was actually the very insistent early birds outside my bedroom window.  Oh, and this poem is called a rictameter, marked by the syllable count per line of 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2.  Images by: Rat - retrojunk.com, birds - metrolic.com 

36 comments:

  1. Ewww... I like rats, as long as they're not carrying bubonic plague and jumping for my throat...LOL
    This was quite a dream that fitted the prompt to a 'T' :)

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  2. Thanks Daydreamer. Yes, I went very literal with this one.

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  3. Nice sounds to wake up to ~ Enjoyed the poetry form ~

    Happy weekend ~

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  4. I always look for the meaning in dreams and I wonder if somehow the dreams are supposed to give us messages...lovely write, Mary.

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  5. I love the contrast, Mary!!! You caught the grim of such a fearful dream and replaced it so readily with the positive light of day. Well done!!

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  6. What a timely dream! Love the switch from dreaming rats to waking to songbirds.

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  7. Yes, so happy you ended with the charm of songbirds. I have dealt with rats and snakes lately..eeeewwww
    http://ellasedge.blogspot.com/2012/06/hare-way-to-stars.html
    Nicely done~

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  8. Definitely a good description of the rats running down the clock! Quite creepy. I had not heard of the form and like the shape it created. Excellent.

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  9. Definitely better to have it be birds than rats! I did enjoy the form that you wrote in, and am pleased that you had such a timely nightmare to share with this prompt!

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    1. Yes, this one was quite literal, and timed just right for your prompt!

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  10. I am impressed by the way you shaped your poem, and love "and then roll over toward birdsong morning". That phrase so much catches the hope for a new day.

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  11. Killer birds or killer rats
    Either can be taken care of by cats..haha

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  12. Your form allows the images of fear to gain in intensity before easing out again with your resolution. I can't be very nice to dream of rats.

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    1. Thank you Kerry. And, I think what may have started the whole thing was a couple nights before I heard a bat squeaking in the house!

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  13. I like your choice of the rictameter, and the way you used it. Excellent write, Mary. It made me think of a bird or birds here making sounds like a lost cat. I'm always getting up to rescue the nonexistent cat. And that's when I'm awake.
    K

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    1. Haha - I believe it Kay, they can be tricky.

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  14. well written...interesting meter too

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  15. I'm so old this has me thinking: Her Windsong stays on my mind...ack...
    Thanks for that creepy rat ;o.(smile)

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    1. Hahaha - I'm that old too! And yeah, have fun with the rat...I know I did, lol.

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  16. Mary Bach...
    Thanks for dropping by with an imprompto 55 of sorts.
    Yeah, I'm itching to get back for some Friday Fun.
    Loved your 55?...:-)
    I'll let you know when I'm coming back, but it will be real soon!!
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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    1. Glad to hear you're feeling better. I don't mean to rush you, just thought you might like to know we're thinking about you. :o)

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  17. Rats..I don't like them at all..but love the birdsong morning...Lovely piece!

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    1. Thanks Susie, I actually had a pet rat in college for awhile. He was pretty sweet, but the rats of nightmares are completely different!

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  19. ewwww RATS! I HATES rats. Great poem though. Well done.

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  20. It's a cracking little poem - and looks fairly hard to craft, so well done!

    Actually, Mary, it's the little early birds I could throttle! I've a few adamant sparrows that like to have a party at 3.45am on my bedroom window sills for some reason. My hubby says I'm a summer stick-in-the-mud whereas I simply refer to myself as a year-round-hibernator.......given half a chance...LoL

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  21. Oh, me too Helena! I'm right there with you on that! And thanks, it's not really so hard...give it a try.

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  22. I've been having lots of strange unwanted dreams this last week because I was sick. They involved not rats but ex girlfriends and old lifestyles I don't care to return to. Nice poem, I probably won't write one about mine.

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  23. Oh, you've got a whole different level of nightmare there Elliot. Hope you feeling better! And thanks for reading and commenting!

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  24. That's putting a ratty situation to good use. Clever poem!

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  25. I love "birdsong morning"! I wasn't sure I was going to read this, but I'm glad I did.
    K

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