I am not your sweetheart
my love is savory,
it tastes of salt
there is a bite to it, and
at times
it can sting
but oh,
this is the spice of life -
Relish me
After some input from members of Facial Expression Poetry Group (many thanks) and some thinking and head scratching on my part I have an edited version of the above poem which is as follows:
I am not Your Sweetheart
My love tastes of salt
there is a bite to it, and
at times
it can sting
but oh,
this is the spice of life.
Savor me.
Really liked this take on the prompt, and especially liked the clever play of words.
ReplyDelete... the way love should be ~~ spicy!
ReplyDeleteSavory's better than sweet - less fattening, too!
ReplyDeleteHi Eric - thanks :o)
ReplyDeleteSalt is seductive, isn't it? You've captured its beckoning perfectly:-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Jabblog. It took a bit to figure out what direction to go with that crystal salt cellar.
ReplyDeleteVery tasty, indeed..thanks for this treat!
ReplyDeleteDelicious!
ReplyDeleteWow! Temptress! Love the savory and salty tone to this poem!
ReplyDeleteThe love that is worth having always stings a bit, great take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteNothing like a spicy life...
ReplyDeleteAww - thanks Lyn and Elaine.
ReplyDeleteLightverse - Thanks, but you should probably take everything I write with a grain of salt, lol
Brigid - I couldn't agree more, thanks!
This is divine.
ReplyDeletesuperb magpie.
Thank you so much!
ReplyDeleteVery lovely.
ReplyDeletePaul C - sorry I missed you there, yes, a little spice is a good thing!
ReplyDeleteJacqui - thank you :o)
smiles..taht is the spice of life...i like the play on relish me as well...i like the bite...
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian - I do like the effect of multiple meanings of words in this language of ours.
ReplyDeleteNice!! Relish is a fun twist.
ReplyDeleteThank you Tess. I really enjoy the Magpies!
ReplyDeleteplayful and fun take.
ReplyDeleteHappy Thursday.
Thanks Jingle!
ReplyDeleteThe edited version works really well. I liked it.
ReplyDeletePoetry24…where news is the Muse
Just an amazing write... you played with words so beautifully!
ReplyDeleteShort Poems
Thank you Martin, appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteMarinela - Thanks so much!