Tuesday, February 15, 2011

Magpie Tales # 53



I am not your sweetheart
my love is savory,
it tastes of salt
there is a bite to it, and
at times
it can sting
but oh,
this is the spice of life -
Relish me




After some input from members of Facial Expression Poetry Group (many thanks) and some thinking and head scratching on my part I have an edited version of the above poem which is as follows:


I am not Your Sweetheart

My love tastes of salt
there is a bite to it, and
at times
it can sting
but oh,
this is the spice of life.
Savor me.

25 comments:

  1. Really liked this take on the prompt, and especially liked the clever play of words.

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  2. ... the way love should be ~~ spicy!

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  3. Savory's better than sweet - less fattening, too!

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  4. Salt is seductive, isn't it? You've captured its beckoning perfectly:-)

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  5. Thanks Jabblog. It took a bit to figure out what direction to go with that crystal salt cellar.

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  6. Very tasty, indeed..thanks for this treat!

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  7. Wow! Temptress! Love the savory and salty tone to this poem!

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  8. The love that is worth having always stings a bit, great take on the prompt.

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  9. Aww - thanks Lyn and Elaine.

    Lightverse - Thanks, but you should probably take everything I write with a grain of salt, lol

    Brigid - I couldn't agree more, thanks!

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  10. Paul C - sorry I missed you there, yes, a little spice is a good thing!

    Jacqui - thank you :o)

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  11. smiles..taht is the spice of life...i like the play on relish me as well...i like the bite...

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  12. Thanks Brian - I do like the effect of multiple meanings of words in this language of ours.

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  13. Thank you Tess. I really enjoy the Magpies!

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  14. playful and fun take.

    Happy Thursday.

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  15. Just an amazing write... you played with words so beautifully!
    Short Poems

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  16. Thank you Martin, appreciate it.

    Marinela - Thanks so much!

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