Friday, February 25, 2011

Magpie Tales # 54 - Missing Piece




How can it be?
the pieces don’t fit anymore,
there’s a space
where we used to fit together,
full convex curve
butted up against concave.
Now there’s an ocean of mattress between us
And so many things
have fallen through
that gap

21 comments:

  1. I don't think this is quite right yet...but I'm posting anyway. It may evolve.

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  2. I love...

    'Now there’s an ocean of mattress between us
    And so many things
    have fallen through
    that gap'

    So much story in those lines. Very nice Magpie!

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  3. Oh, this is more than right! Perfectly describes that spooning position and the emotions that surface when it's gone.

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  4. Well, it's 99% right, but I'm not going to quibble over a mere 1%.

    It's heavy, that's for sure.

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  5. Now that's a heavy one, Mary... A very vivid description of a relationship going south..

    A beautifully written magpie, my friend..

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  6. beautiful.

    aw... thanks for the comment on my magpie... and yes, English isn't our language. Thanks!

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  7. Thank you all for your comments.
    Haze - you're welcome; you do a great job with English!

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  8. I think it is really right too! But you are the artist here so only you really know. Wonderful writing.

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  9. Thank you Kristen. I thought yours was great too!

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  10. Clever picture painted with your words. Well written.

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  11. The sadness of those gaps is very clear in your magpie...

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  12. An ocean of mattress is so telling. This one packs a punch.

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  13. Loved this Magpie, so bittersweet. The gap needs to be bridged.

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  14. Thank you Brigid...seems like it's not a unique experience either.

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  15. fabulous wonders...
    things will be alright...

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  16. Thank you PPPL, and thanks for reading.

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