There's something about poetry that saves me… ~ Martin Espada
I don't think this is quite right yet...but I'm posting anyway. It may evolve.
I love... 'Now there’s an ocean of mattress between usAnd so many thingshave fallen throughthat gap'So much story in those lines. Very nice Magpie!
Oh, this is more than right! Perfectly describes that spooning position and the emotions that surface when it's gone.
yeah this is more than right :)
Well, it's 99% right, but I'm not going to quibble over a mere 1%.It's heavy, that's for sure.
Now that's a heavy one, Mary... A very vivid description of a relationship going south.. A beautifully written magpie, my friend..
beautiful.aw... thanks for the comment on my magpie... and yes, English isn't our language. Thanks!
Thank you all for your comments. Haze - you're welcome; you do a great job with English!
I think it is really right too! But you are the artist here so only you really know. Wonderful writing.
Thank you Kristen. I thought yours was great too!
It´s a good piece, I like it!
Thank you evalinn!
Clever picture painted with your words. Well written.
The sadness of those gaps is very clear in your magpie...
An ocean of mattress is so telling. This one packs a punch.
Thank you Jinksy and Tess.
Loved this Magpie, so bittersweet. The gap needs to be bridged.
Thank you Brigid...seems like it's not a unique experience either.
fabulous wonders...things will be alright...
Thank you PPPL, and thanks for reading.