Friday, February 25, 2011

Magpie Tales # 54 - Missing Piece




How can it be?
the pieces don’t fit anymore,
there’s a space
where we used to fit together,
full convex curve
butted up against concave.
Now there’s an ocean of mattress between us
And so many things
have fallen through
that gap
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20 comments:

  1. Other MaryFebruary 25, 2011 at 10:05 AM

    I don't think this is quite right yet...but I'm posting anyway. It may evolve.

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  2. SusannahFebruary 25, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    I love...

    'Now there’s an ocean of mattress between us
    And so many things
    have fallen through
    that gap'

    So much story in those lines. Very nice Magpie!

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  3. HelenFebruary 25, 2011 at 11:04 AM

    Oh, this is more than right! Perfectly describes that spooning position and the emotions that surface when it's gone.

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  4. Celestial DreamzFebruary 25, 2011 at 11:22 AM

    yeah this is more than right :)

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  5. BubbaFebruary 25, 2011 at 11:55 AM

    Well, it's 99% right, but I'm not going to quibble over a mere 1%.

    It's heavy, that's for sure.

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  6. AnonymousFebruary 25, 2011 at 5:18 PM

    Now that's a heavy one, Mary... A very vivid description of a relationship going south..

    A beautifully written magpie, my friend..

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  7. AnonymousFebruary 25, 2011 at 5:39 PM

    beautiful.

    aw... thanks for the comment on my magpie... and yes, English isn't our language. Thanks!

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  8. Other MaryFebruary 26, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    Thank you all for your comments.
    Haze - you're welcome; you do a great job with English!

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  9. Kristen HaskellFebruary 26, 2011 at 3:23 PM

    I think it is really right too! But you are the artist here so only you really know. Wonderful writing.

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  10. Other MaryFebruary 26, 2011 at 6:03 PM

    Thank you Kristen. I thought yours was great too!

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  11. EvalinnFebruary 27, 2011 at 10:17 AM

    It´s a good piece, I like it!

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  12. Other MaryFebruary 27, 2011 at 4:06 PM

    Thank you evalinn!

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  13. MaryFebruary 27, 2011 at 5:46 PM

    Clever picture painted with your words. Well written.

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  14. JinksyFebruary 28, 2011 at 7:35 AM

    The sadness of those gaps is very clear in your magpie...

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  15. Tess KincaidFebruary 28, 2011 at 7:43 AM

    An ocean of mattress is so telling. This one packs a punch.

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  16. Other MaryFebruary 28, 2011 at 8:13 AM

    Thank you Jinksy and Tess.

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  17. Brigid O'ConnorFebruary 28, 2011 at 8:15 AM

    Loved this Magpie, so bittersweet. The gap needs to be bridged.

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  18. Other MaryFebruary 28, 2011 at 4:48 PM

    Thank you Brigid...seems like it's not a unique experience either.

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  19. Hyde Park Poetry PalaceMarch 2, 2011 at 2:26 PM

    fabulous wonders...
    things will be alright...

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  20. Other MaryMarch 2, 2011 at 3:24 PM

    Thank you PPPL, and thanks for reading.

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