Wednesday, April 27, 2011

A Real Gem



She is
brilliant, jewel-like
a bright and shining gem
sharp edged and many faceted
but she lacks regenerative powers;
her crystalline smile glittering,
a fault in the fa├žade
threatens to break
apart


Note: the picture is a writing prompt from Magpie Tales, a site to help inspire writers made by Tess Kincade. If you click on the title of my poem it will take you to that lovely site. I hightly recommend it, and Tess' Life at Willow Manor. The poetry form is called a Rictameter, which is characterized by each line having a set number of syllables: 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2.

20 comments:

  1. My interpretation of your Magpie .... a high strung woman going off the deep end. Really well done!

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  2. Helen - you got it, one of those perfectionists.

    Deborah - thank you

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  3. Is it bad that I want to see the show? Yes, it's bad - I should be helping her not waiting for the crack. Love the form on this!

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  4. Very nice. :-) I like how you've formed the words into the shape of the jewel.

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  5. I can see this woman clearly. Perfectly coiffed and made up. Dressed to perfection. But if something goes awry in her meticulous plans, the facade shatters. Like a Stepford wife on the fritz!

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  6. Stunning piece. Clearly coined fragments of vividly cut glass. Thanks for stopping by to comment.

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  7. this poor fragile diamond needs a bit of TLC from a girlfriend.
    Perhaps.... wait for it. This is a time
    "When a girl is a diamond't best friend!"
    I will now slink away.

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  8. Lovely piece, Mary, I thought it was about your ill friend at first.
    I can see the perfectionist in this one.

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  9. Thanks all.
    Bug, when people crack it does make for a good show.
    Paul - ty, the form is called Rictameter, specific syllable count in each line, 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2
    Lola - Oh, the Stepford wives gone wrong ...that's perfect!
    Reflections - ty, I enjoyed yours as well
    Lucy - thank you
    Isabel - thanks
    Brigid - Thank you for remembering my ill friend. She died on Monday; funeral today. Still to raw to write about her passing just now.

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  10. And how could I forget Stafford? Maybe because he slinked away (slunk away?) Anyway, funny comment, where ever you are skulking.

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  11. beautiful, crystal clear piece...reminds me of one who is about to come undone, not now but surely...

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  13. What an intense imagery- just like the colors of the image- stark n bright!!
    Very well done..

    Friday Hugs xox

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  14. Nilofer - thank you. I'll take a squint at yours.
    Olivia - thanks so much. xo

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  15. oh wow - i like what you've done with with the prompt - beautiful words to go with the poem

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  16. Thank you Claudia and Tumblewords!

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