Wednesday, January 29, 2014

Briefly

With a forked tongue
you flay me,
slay me,
flip and fillet me
then pay me
a veiled complement...

double entendre?   


 Mama Zen asked us to write a Twitter-sized poem (140 characters or less) over in the Imaginary Garden. This one is a mere 116. 
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25 comments:

  1. Pat HattJanuary 29, 2014 at 5:58 PM

    Those forked tongues should be stabbed with a fork

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  2. AnonymousJanuary 29, 2014 at 6:01 PM

    Love your use of rhyme and alliteration here. Excellent.

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  3. UnknownJanuary 29, 2014 at 6:07 PM

    How perfectly you portray the betrayer here. The rhyme scheme and concise diction are ideal.

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  4. CloudiaJanuary 29, 2014 at 6:16 PM

    Wonderful word play

    ALOHA from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
    > < } } ( ° >

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  5. Ginny BrannanJanuary 29, 2014 at 6:17 PM

    Cool, I love when such few words can say so much…and with meter and rhyme to boot!! Well done, Mary!

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  6. SusanJanuary 29, 2014 at 7:16 PM

    Clever indeed. Funny that so many are about talking.

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  7. HannahJanuary 29, 2014 at 7:18 PM

    I need to echo Ginny's sentiment here...stated well, Mary...concise and powerful.

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  8. AnonymousJanuary 29, 2014 at 7:45 PM

    It slithers like a snake... I like the line flip and fillet me..

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  9. JimJanuary 29, 2014 at 8:23 PM

    Nice Mary. Your 'fork' may in practice, by using your "f' word choices, be a spatula, a knife, or a set of tongs. :) You are sooo clever.
    I love it. And can relate. I am chief cook and bottle washer at our home now for at least one more week. Mrs. Jim is on crutches recovering from the bunion surgery on January 2nd.
    For sure I have no evil intent toward her.
    ..

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  10. AnonymousJanuary 29, 2014 at 8:34 PM

    Mary, that's got great pace and rhythm ~

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  11. HelenJanuary 29, 2014 at 11:22 PM

    Oh yes ....

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  12. Vandana SharmaJanuary 29, 2014 at 11:55 PM

    nailed it!

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  13. Susie ClevengerJanuary 30, 2014 at 3:08 AM

    Oh those forked tongues....love it!!

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  14. ayalaJanuary 30, 2014 at 5:50 AM

    Clever and great :)

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  15. Maude LynnJanuary 30, 2014 at 8:51 AM

    This is VERY cool.

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  16. Kerry O'ConnorJanuary 30, 2014 at 9:14 AM

    Very clever word play, with a strong message... I don't trust those who compliment with a forked tongue.

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  17. UnknownJanuary 30, 2014 at 11:14 AM

    Wow. That is pretty impressive. You did an amazing job with such few words.

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  18. Brian MillerJanuary 30, 2014 at 1:29 PM

    ha. it could be....smiles....
    ah be careful they dont just use you
    you know....smiles.

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  19. hedgewitchJanuary 30, 2014 at 2:35 PM

    Wish I could say I hadn't been there. Great job, Mary, with just a few small nails for that hammer.

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  20. izzyJanuary 31, 2014 at 8:35 AM

    Wow that is short and to the point (HAH!) thanks for showing us what to do-NOT do... : )

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  21. EllaJanuary 31, 2014 at 10:25 AM

    Oh that tongue that wishes to spoon later! Wonderful to read....very clever!

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  22. MargaretJanuary 31, 2014 at 7:05 PM

    With one so clever, this couldn't possibly be about you! Love it.

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  23. Kay L. DaviesFebruary 1, 2014 at 1:19 PM

    Wow, wonderful use of words, Mary. Fabulous (and fun) rhymes.
    K

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  24. A Cuban In LondonFebruary 2, 2014 at 5:20 PM

    Love the shortness and directness of it. Many thanks.

    Greetings from London.

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  25. martineFebruary 5, 2014 at 9:26 AM

    like

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