Wednesday, January 29, 2014

Briefly

With a forked tongue
you flay me,
slay me,
flip and fillet me
then pay me
a veiled complement...

double entendre?   


 Mama Zen asked us to write a Twitter-sized poem (140 characters or less) over in the Imaginary Garden. This one is a mere 116. 

25 comments:

  1. Those forked tongues should be stabbed with a fork

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  2. Love your use of rhyme and alliteration here. Excellent.

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  3. How perfectly you portray the betrayer here. The rhyme scheme and concise diction are ideal.

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  4. Wonderful word play

    ALOHA from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
    > < } } ( ° >

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  5. Cool, I love when such few words can say so much…and with meter and rhyme to boot!! Well done, Mary!

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  6. Clever indeed. Funny that so many are about talking.

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  7. I need to echo Ginny's sentiment here...stated well, Mary...concise and powerful.

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  8. It slithers like a snake... I like the line flip and fillet me..

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  9. Nice Mary. Your 'fork' may in practice, by using your "f' word choices, be a spatula, a knife, or a set of tongs. :) You are sooo clever.
    I love it. And can relate. I am chief cook and bottle washer at our home now for at least one more week. Mrs. Jim is on crutches recovering from the bunion surgery on January 2nd.
    For sure I have no evil intent toward her.
    ..

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  10. Mary, that's got great pace and rhythm ~

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  11. Oh those forked tongues....love it!!

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  12. Very clever word play, with a strong message... I don't trust those who compliment with a forked tongue.

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  13. Wow. That is pretty impressive. You did an amazing job with such few words.

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  14. ha. it could be....smiles....
    ah be careful they dont just use you
    you know....smiles.

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  15. Wish I could say I hadn't been there. Great job, Mary, with just a few small nails for that hammer.

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  16. Wow that is short and to the point (HAH!) thanks for showing us what to do-NOT do... : )

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  17. Oh that tongue that wishes to spoon later! Wonderful to read....very clever!

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  18. With one so clever, this couldn't possibly be about you! Love it.

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  19. Wow, wonderful use of words, Mary. Fabulous (and fun) rhymes.
    K

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  20. Love the shortness and directness of it. Many thanks.

    Greetings from London.

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