Where are you going and
what will you do on a
windy Wednesday evening,
without your slippers or
wand or beans? Can you still
whisper the stars to sing?
Will you order the waves?
Over at dVerse Poets' Pub Vandana Sharma has introduced us to a for called Pleiades. It is a seven line poem with each line beginning with the
same letter as the title and having six syllables in each line. The title must
be of one word only. Follow the link for more.
what a wonderful write... loved all the "w's" and the visuals.
ReplyDeleteThank you Wolfsrosebud...sort of goes with your name! lol
Deletea beautiful sketch...
ReplyDeleteThank you Sumana.
Deletethose last couple lines are really magic....whispering the stars to sing...and waves to order....so cool...i like the searching feel in this....
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian. I think I might have two halves of different poems stuck together here, lol.
DeleteMarvellous !
ReplyDeleteThank you Cressida!
DeleteNicely penned, Mary. Wanted to note that "Wandering" would work almost as good as "Wondering" in the title. Magical feel with wand and beans."Where are you going and what will you do on a windy Wednesday evening, without your slippers…" also brings to mind some of the elderly that I work with, "roamers" we call them.) Well done, totally enjoyed this one, my friend.
ReplyDeleteAwww, roamers. That is so touching Ginny. (Glad you don't call them "walkers"!) I actually went back and forth between Wander and Wonder for the title. Thanks so much!
ReplyDeleteWondering and wandering...without slippers, wand or beans.....pondering life...well done.
ReplyDeleteOrder the waves and maybe they'll bring back the slippers
ReplyDeleteI think because of poems like this, we can still believe magic exists :)
ReplyDeleteAwwww, what a nice comment. Thank you!
Deletewandering like a wanderer sometimes makes us feel alive and free from all tensions
ReplyDeleteYes, hopefully it does.
DeleteOh, I do hope that those stars will still swing!
ReplyDeleteI meant 'sing.' Sigh!
DeleteLol, tgif! Right Mary? Thanks, I hope the stars both sing and swing!
Deletei like the surrealism about slippers or wands or beans.
ReplyDeleteI was going for magic stuff from fairy tails. :o)
DeleteI am liking the w words & that ending verses are wand magical ~
ReplyDeleteBecause Vandana asked us to include a heavenly body in the poem, I thought you addressed yours to the (personified) moon without ever mentioning her name. — sweet and subtle. Lovely poem, whether I'm wrong or right.
ReplyDeleteOh, thank you Rosemary.
DeleteGreat use of alliteration in this, Mary. And I love the room you give our imaginations to guess who "you" might be. This has a quality that, I think, children would love.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! :o)
DeleteMary, this is fantastic. I think it is my favorite of the pleiades form poems!!!!
ReplyDeleteGosh, thank you Sherry! There are so many good ones.
DeleteA nice set up to the prompt Mary! Great 'w' lines!
ReplyDeleteHank
Thanks Hank.
DeleteSo subtle and nice.. W is a great letter to use, and the additional alliteration adds - just as the questions..
ReplyDeleteThank you Bjorn. :o)
DeleteI like the flow of this. The form doesn't feel forced or artificial.
ReplyDeleteThanks Justin.
DeleteYou nailed the subtle sweet Moon Maiden verse expertly; & I did see the moon in it before the last line; way to rock the prompt.
ReplyDeleteVery good! Thank you Glenn. :o)
ReplyDeleteMagical :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Ayala. xx
Deletegrinning, and thinking of that Lawrence Welk line, wunnerful wunnerful (Mom liked to listen to him on Saturday nights... I was an unwilling sponge, as it turns out) ~
ReplyDeleteHahaha - my mom liked that too, and so did my Granny!
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