Thursday, April 12, 2012

Another Triolet

I lower the shutters behind my eyes
so no one can see what’s missing,
blindly beguiled by a clever disguise.

I lower the shutters behind my eyes
and hold your attention between my thighs
with wine, cabaret and kissing.

I lower the shutters behind my eyes
so no one can see what’s missing.




This triolet is exactly 55 words, so I offer it to FF55 where G-man offers, and asks for 55 words about anything at all.  The triolet is a short poem of eight line with only two rhymes used throughout.  The first line is repeated in the fourth and seventh lines; the second line is repeated in the final line.  This gives a deceptively simple appearance: ABaAbAB, where capital letters indicate repeated lines.  

22 comments:

  1. oy...esp tough in an intimate relationship...and behind those eyes just what you are dreaming...or who as opposed to the one you are with...smiles.

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  2. Sadly, I see so much of this...
    thanks for reading Brian.

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    1. Lowering shutters- hmmm did I do that this week-?
      Well I love your triolet/55. thanks

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  3. Yeah there is a lot of this, just going with the flow when one or both don't even want to be there.

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  4. Mary Bach...
    You Rock!!!
    Loved your 55
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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    1. Thanks G-Man, hope you have a great weekend too!

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  6. Tried that, it gets repetitive & unsatisfying after a while. Not the poem, the practice. ~Mary

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    1. Thanks Mary. I'm always glad when you stop by.

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  7. Absolutely beautiful and sexy. I eny your skill with this form. :)

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  8. Other than that, Other Mary, what's sensual and mysterious in your life?!!!!!!
    This is wonderful! And it makes me want to write another triolet myself. I really love the form.

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    1. lol, Thanks Lydia. I'm on a triolet kick lately too. And, actually I'm pretty boring, I just listen a lot. :o)

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  9. Pretense, sometimes happens in the best of relationships. Love how you captured this. That second stanza really kind of says it all. Wow. Great form too!

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    1. Thank you Mama Z. - I really loved your dVerse piece too!

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  11. You've touched a nerve there Mary.......

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    1. Apparently I have. Thanks for reading.

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