I lower the shutters behind my eyes
so no one can see what’s missing,
blindly beguiled by a clever disguise.
I lower the shutters behind my eyes
and hold your attention between my thighs
with wine, cabaret and kissing.
I lower the shutters behind my eyes
so no one can see what’s missing.
This triolet is exactly 55 words, so I offer it to FF55 where G-man offers, and asks for 55 words about anything at all. The triolet is a short poem of eight line with only two rhymes used throughout. The first line is repeated in the fourth and seventh lines; the second line is repeated in the final line. This gives a deceptively simple appearance: ABaAbAB, where capital letters indicate repeated lines.
This triolet is exactly 55 words, so I offer it to FF55 where G-man offers, and asks for 55 words about anything at all. The triolet is a short poem of eight line with only two rhymes used throughout. The first line is repeated in the fourth and seventh lines; the second line is repeated in the final line. This gives a deceptively simple appearance: ABaAbAB, where capital letters indicate repeated lines.
oy...esp tough in an intimate relationship...and behind those eyes just what you are dreaming...or who as opposed to the one you are with...smiles.
ReplyDeleteSadly, I see so much of this...
ReplyDeletethanks for reading Brian.
Lowering shutters- hmmm did I do that this week-?
DeleteWell I love your triolet/55. thanks
Thank you Izzy. (hug)
DeleteYeah there is a lot of this, just going with the flow when one or both don't even want to be there.
ReplyDeleteMary Bach...
ReplyDeleteYou Rock!!!
Loved your 55
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Thanks G-Man, hope you have a great weekend too!
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ReplyDeleteTried that, it gets repetitive & unsatisfying after a while. Not the poem, the practice. ~Mary
ReplyDeleteThanks Mary. I'm always glad when you stop by.
DeleteAbsolutely beautiful and sexy. I eny your skill with this form. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Nara!
DeleteOther than that, Other Mary, what's sensual and mysterious in your life?!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful! And it makes me want to write another triolet myself. I really love the form.
lol, Thanks Lydia. I'm on a triolet kick lately too. And, actually I'm pretty boring, I just listen a lot. :o)
DeletePretense, sometimes happens in the best of relationships. Love how you captured this. That second stanza really kind of says it all. Wow. Great form too!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Ginny.
DeleteFantastic piece! Just, wow!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mama Z. - I really loved your dVerse piece too!
DeleteLovely, it wowed me.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Dave.
DeleteYou've touched a nerve there Mary.......
ReplyDeleteApparently I have. Thanks for reading.
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