Some claim April rain (Grace of Words like foam on the waves)
brings the blossoms of May, but
trees here are hasty
like youth, ardor unrestrained (( Margaret - Art Happens 365)
eager for springs first sweet kiss
Sakura blossoms (Kerry O'Connor of Skylover)
In the arms of old man tree
Drops of moonlit milk
showgirls will perform a dance Ella's Edge
inspired by Moon light's embrace
her graceful waves in Laurie Kolp Poetry
a risque spring ballet, legs
kick the darkened sky
stars wink at rainbow feathers Susie Clevenger of Confessions of A L. G.
that tease with each fluttering
My full heart flutters, Me
I become dancer and dance
under April’s moon
Imaginary Garden with Real Toads is having us do a group poem! It's called a renga, and has an alternating syllable pattern in the stanzas of 5-7-5 / 7-7. The challenge is presented by Grace, who did the first stanza. I am the 7th participant. Take a look at the whole thing, and the details by clicking on the Imaginary Garden link, and join the fun!
Oh I like the way your stanza brings so many elements together. Perfect.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kerry - I was hoping there weren't any rules about using 'I'
DeleteI switched darkened to silver. I love what you added.
ReplyDeleteThank you Laurie!
DeleteI do like the use of "I". It really personalizes this poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks Margaret
DeleteA bit insatiable. ~Mary
ReplyDeleteum...(shrugs) :o)
DeleteDancing under a moon
ReplyDeleteDoes not make one a loon
Maybe thinking it will bring blossoms of May
Could give one such a display
Interesting form
Surely not the norm
Thanks Pat. Far be it from me to be normal...
DeleteI love your addition and personalization...I have really enjoyed this challenge
ReplyDeleteThank you Susie! Me too; I think it's a great idea.
DeleteTHANK YOU for showing it all put together. That is really helpful. I love the way your stanza ties it all together.........what an intriguing exercise."I become dancer and dance under April's moon." Just beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry. Will you add a stanza to the mix? Love to hear from you...
DeleteWonderful Mary...let's keep it going!
ReplyDeleteI will post it when we are done and add everyone's name!
I too like that you added I, it adds a great impact~
I love it...
Thanks Ella! It's really wonderful the way this...developed. Everyone added their unique bit, and then we had some gestalt action going on. I like that you'll go back and all it all. I will too!
DeleteLove this! Just so cool, am reading it backwards towards the beginning and it's amazing to see how it grew.
ReplyDeleteHey, thanks Shanyn! I agree!
ReplyDeleteI occurs to me that I should mention that the idea of the dancer becoming the dance is an allusion to a Yeats poem, 'Among School Children'.
ReplyDeleteHa! Now I have to search for Yeats poem! Thanks for the signpost. ♥
ReplyDeleteIt's a wonderful poem. But then I'm biased.
DeleteI know all about heart flutters... LOL
ReplyDeletePacemaker? Hahaha, just kidding ;-)
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