Wednesday, April 11, 2012

Precocious - Group Poem



Some claim April rain                            (Grace of Words like foam on the waves)
brings the blossoms of May, but
trees here are hasty


like youth, ardor unrestrained               (( Margaret - Art Happens 365)
eager for springs first sweet kiss


Sakura blossoms                                    (Kerry O'Connor of Skylover)
In the arms of old man tree
Drops of moonlit milk


showgirls will perform a dance             Ella's Edge
inspired by Moon light's embrace


her graceful waves in                            Laurie Kolp Poetry
a risque spring ballet, legs
kick the darkened sky


stars wink at rainbow feathers              Susie Clevenger of Confessions of A L. G.
that tease with each fluttering



My full heart flutters,                           Me
I become dancer and dance
under April’s moon


Imaginary Garden with Real Toads is having us do a group poem!  It's called a renga, and has an alternating syllable pattern in the stanzas of 5-7-5 / 7-7.  The challenge is presented by Grace, who did the first stanza.  I am the 7th participant.  Take a look at the whole thing, and the details by clicking on the Imaginary Garden link, and join the fun!

23 comments:

  1. Oh I like the way your stanza brings so many elements together. Perfect.

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    1. Thanks Kerry - I was hoping there weren't any rules about using 'I'

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  2. I switched darkened to silver. I love what you added.

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  3. I do like the use of "I". It really personalizes this poem.

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  4. Dancing under a moon
    Does not make one a loon
    Maybe thinking it will bring blossoms of May
    Could give one such a display
    Interesting form
    Surely not the norm

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    1. Thanks Pat. Far be it from me to be normal...

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  5. I love your addition and personalization...I have really enjoyed this challenge

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    1. Thank you Susie! Me too; I think it's a great idea.

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  6. THANK YOU for showing it all put together. That is really helpful. I love the way your stanza ties it all together.........what an intriguing exercise."I become dancer and dance under April's moon." Just beautiful.

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    1. Thank you Sherry. Will you add a stanza to the mix? Love to hear from you...

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  7. Wonderful Mary...let's keep it going!
    I will post it when we are done and add everyone's name!
    I too like that you added I, it adds a great impact~
    I love it...

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    1. Thanks Ella! It's really wonderful the way this...developed. Everyone added their unique bit, and then we had some gestalt action going on. I like that you'll go back and all it all. I will too!

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  8. Love this! Just so cool, am reading it backwards towards the beginning and it's amazing to see how it grew.

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  9. I occurs to me that I should mention that the idea of the dancer becoming the dance is an allusion to a Yeats poem, 'Among School Children'.

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  10. Ha! Now I have to search for Yeats poem! Thanks for the signpost. ♥

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    1. It's a wonderful poem. But then I'm biased.

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  11. I know all about heart flutters... LOL

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