Monday, April 2, 2012

Doctor, Doctor!


I’m waiting for a magic box
to take me far away from here
with just one key for all its locks.

I’m waiting for a magic box
to turn back time and foil the clocks.
I’ll step inside and disappear.

I’m waiting for a magic box
to take me far away from here.

This form is a triolet: eight lines with only two rhymes used throughout. The first line is repeated in the fourth and seventh lines; the second line is repeated in the final line.  Only the first two end-words are used to complete the tight rhyme scheme: ABaAabAB, where capital letters indicate repeated lines.


This is for Real Toads where you can go to read some wonderful poetry.

24 comments:

  1. that is a perfectly lovely triolet! good work!

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    1. Thanks Marian, this was a fun little one.

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  2. All you have to do is say, "Beam me up, Scotty!"

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  3. Hee hee, love Timoteo's comment. Enjoyed your triolet. I havent tried one yet. (Hmmm....there are the two rhyming lines right there:))

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    1. Thanks Sherry. I'd be interested in reading one of yours.

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  4. I have been waiting for a magic box for years...Loved it

    Wander

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    1. I know it's out there, and when it finally comes I'm gonna make it come back sooner! Thanks W.

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  5. lovely triolet.must try it one of these days.delightful read.

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    1. Thank you Abin, yes do try one, I'd like to read it.

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  6. Captian Kirk on my header can beam you up..hahaha...no magic is just tragic.

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    1. Hahaha - you did read my comment! :D

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  7. Ahhh this is lovely. Could you please give me a ride anywhere in your magic box? I wrote a triolet for NaPoWriMo too and posted it to my secondary blog 'The Sky Clears', in case you want to check. Mine wasn't this fresh, it's very painful for me to write form poetry. :S

    Kiss you Mary. <3

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    1. Oh, thanks so much Kenia! I'll take a look at yours too!

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  8. we all seem to be waiting for that, or the aliens to pick us up and take us to a betterplace

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  9. I would like such a magic box myself. Simple like a spell chant. :) Cheers!

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  10. A magic box....nice, Mary. I wish the magic box find you :)

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  11. I like your triolet. Very well constructed and not without a touch of pathos.
    Now . . down to business! Will any Doctor do?

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    1. Thank you Doctor, lol. And, not just any doctor...but I can think of a few Who would do ;-)

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  12. ha ... any Physician's signature will do ;) Didn't know that was all it took. Fun poem

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