Image by R.A.D. Stainforth
I remember
gentle pressure of your lips.
Friction, spark, fire:
you ignite,
I burn.
But that’s past.
Turns out the brass
ring
was only smoke.
A stale future
permeates my clothes and hair.
Ashes,ashes,we all fall down.
Check out more responses to the picture by R.A.D. Stainforth at The Mag weekly, online writing prompt provided by Tess Kincaid.
Ooh, I like this. Excellent capture. Perfect last line!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ginny!
Deleteyou ignite, i burn...nice...and then, oy not really...only smoke...nice end as well on the familiar rhyme...
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian.
DeleteGreat use of imagery to burn!
ReplyDeleteThanks Pat - wow, you didn't even rhyme!
DeleteLOVED the whole thing, and the ending is perfect! It starts out so gentle... and then spirals and bursts! nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Margaret, I appreciate it!
DeleteSo often we try to catch the brass ring of life, and then it turns out to be only smoke...
ReplyDeleteYes, too often. Good quiz by the way B.
DeleteThe brass ring was only smoke...sadly all too often...
ReplyDeleteSadly yes. Thanks for the prompt Tess.
DeleteFan-freaking-tastic. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteWoo hoo, thanks Jasmine!
DeleteBrilliant Mag offering here, my girl. Go to the top of the class!
ReplyDeleteGosh, thanks Jinksy!
DeleteEven the brass ring is only smoke..do we ever learn? Amazing!
ReplyDeleteApparently not Lyn. Thanks for reading.
DeleteThis would go well with a lot of black kohl eyeliner.
ReplyDeleteHey Mary - here's to all the best to you in 2013!
DeleteI never met-a-phor I didn't like!
ReplyDeleteSometimes what starts out ablaze burns out quick....love this one Mary! Hope you have a Happy New Year! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Carrie - and Happy New Year to you!
Deletesmokin good indeed....nicely writtena and thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteThank you Wayne, I'm glad you 'stopped by.'
DeleteRealization of impermanence permeates through me..like smoke... more I read this, the more I like it!
ReplyDeleteOh, thank you Za faran!
DeleteAh yes ... we all fall down.
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year, Mary!!!!
Happy New Year Helen :o)
DeleteThis is a wonderful write! Excellent!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Thank you Anna :o)
DeleteI love
ReplyDeleteyou ignite, I burn.
Thank you MAS!
DeleteAll gratuitous things must come to an end, i suppose. Happy new year, Mary
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year and thanks! Sorry I didn't see this sooner!
DeleteThis has me thinking back.I was a smoker for about 15 years and am remembering the senses that were involved.
ReplyDeleteI was never a smoker, but also didn't mind it. But I did dislike the stale, day after smell that would attach to my hair after a night out.
Deletegritty. grim. real. love the ending.
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