Friday, February 8, 2013

Shadow Romance


     Image: Shadows on the Wall by helale,deviantart.com 

The shadow side of romance
dances on the wall,
calls to us, to all.
Shades slide aside
revealing appealing attraction.
There is an unmapped want
we could get lost in.
Come pass through this vastness,
compass useless.
You: less pressed, more driven
Me: precariously, carelessly spilled
out, filled and finally killed
in ceaseless release of self. 

A shadowy 55 for G-man, cause I just love playing with words.  Check out FF55 for more.  Also linked to dVerse Poets Pub where you can go to read LOTS of great poetry.

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44 comments:

  1. Grandmother MaryFebruary 8, 2013 at 9:03 AM

    Loved your take on the other side of romance where a compass is useless and selves can be spilled. But the sound of it all is fun.

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  2. Yvonne OsborneFebruary 8, 2013 at 9:18 AM

    I love the shadow side or romance. I like the wanton... precariously, carelessly spilled. I want that.

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  3. hedgewitchFebruary 8, 2013 at 9:47 AM

    This is sharp, stabbingly so(in a good way) and the conclusion is strong and absolutely perfect. Now I'm going to be humming 'Spill the Wine' for awhile.

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    1. Other MaryFebruary 8, 2013 at 12:00 PM

      Thank you Joy, I always appreciate your commentary. Um, I'll have to look up that song though; I don't think I know it.

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  4. Pat HattFebruary 8, 2013 at 9:56 AM

    The other side can be a scare but sure is fun when it happens at ones lair.

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    1. Other MaryFebruary 8, 2013 at 11:59 AM

      Dark can be good Pat - I hear that's the side where all the cookies are. ;-)

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  5. anthonynorthFebruary 8, 2013 at 10:06 AM

    Great power in this and I like the idea of the shadow side of romance.

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  6. ayalaFebruary 8, 2013 at 10:24 AM

    The shadow side of romance
    dances on the wall....great lines, Mary :)

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  7. Other MaryFebruary 8, 2013 at 11:58 AM

    Thanks Ayala :o)

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  8. Brian MillerFebruary 8, 2013 at 1:41 PM

    getting lost in an unmapped want does not sound half bad you know...smiles....there are shadow and light sides to romance for sure...

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    1. Other MaryFebruary 8, 2013 at 2:52 PM

      Yea Brian, I spend a lot of my time lost...it's not so bad, lol. Thanks for reading.

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  9. Doctor FTSEFebruary 8, 2013 at 1:59 PM

    Well played indeed! You always come up with a thoughful 55. This one is just lovely.

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  10. SusanFebruary 8, 2013 at 1:59 PM

    This is really really good. You make me want to take a stab at poetry again or maybe not. Lovely 55, lovely period.

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    1. Other MaryFebruary 8, 2013 at 3:21 PM

      Thank you so much Susan. I'd love to read one of your 'stabs'!

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  11. G-ManFebruary 8, 2013 at 2:07 PM

    Mary Bach, you did it again.
    You've taken a subject common to us all, and put your Bachsonian spin on it. And turned it into a short masterpiece! The Friday Funfest sure hit the Jackpot with YOU. Hey...You and Me? The Jackpot and the Crackpot!
    Loved your Romantic 55
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End.

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    1. Other MaryFebruary 8, 2013 at 3:22 PM

      Hahaha - I like that Jackpot and Crackpot! Not sure who is who though, lol. Thank you very much Galen. Have a great weekend yourself!

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  12. AnonymousFebruary 8, 2013 at 5:49 PM

    And you play with them wonderfully - this manages both romance and analysis. Have a great weekend. k.

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  13. Other MaryFebruary 9, 2013 at 3:18 PM

    Thank you Karin! I hope you're surviving the storms!

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  14. AnonymousFebruary 10, 2013 at 1:37 PM

    we love to get lost in unmapped wants. it's addictive


    Initiated Kiss

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  15. Other MaryFebruary 10, 2013 at 4:38 PM

    Yes...lol, that's right!

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  16. UnknownFebruary 12, 2013 at 6:21 PM

    Good verb choices and words invoking imagery...I could "see" this poem played out in my mind.

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  17. UnknownFebruary 12, 2013 at 8:30 PM

    I love the internal rhyme and flow here. :)

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  18. kelvin s.m.February 12, 2013 at 9:47 PM

    ...sharp analysis i must say... smiles...

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  19. ClaudiaFebruary 12, 2013 at 11:13 PM

    smiles...not so bad when the compass is useless..diving in head first and spilling oneself out...really like...

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  20. AnonymousFebruary 13, 2013 at 4:18 AM

    Fine wordplay in this exploration of the shadow side of love.

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  21. Sabio LantzFebruary 13, 2013 at 6:15 AM

    Ahhh that so different of purposes meet and call the confluence the same lie: "romance". The waves created at that confluence are captured well by this poem.

    Hey, suggestion: pick a 2-column template from blogger. The three-column one minimizes the important part of your blog -- your wonderful poems. It makes all the side commercials loud and distracting. Just a thought.

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  22. Sabio LantzFebruary 13, 2013 at 6:17 AM

    Oh yes, one more thought: since the English reading mind reads Left to Right, I'd put the other stuff in the RIGHT column. Otherwise, the first thing your blog presents to the eye is not your poem, but the noise on the left.

    It is just one reader's perspective, of course, and perhaps not a normal one by any stretch. :-)

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    1. Other MaryFebruary 13, 2013 at 9:31 AM

      Thank you for that suggestion Sabio. That makes sense.

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  23. Laurie KolpFebruary 13, 2013 at 8:12 AM

    Awesome, Mary... especially like the poetics throughout, as in- Shades slide aside

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  24. Ginny BrannanFebruary 13, 2013 at 9:19 AM

    "...filled and finally killed
    in ceaseless release of self."

    Passion and more than a little heat in this one, Mary. Tasteful and beautifully penned. Love the word play!

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    1. Other MaryFebruary 13, 2013 at 12:06 PM

      Thank you Ginny. I really appreciate your comment.

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  25. MaryFebruary 13, 2013 at 9:28 AM

    Well penned. I do think a compass is so often useless in romance!

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  26. UnknownFebruary 13, 2013 at 5:54 PM

    really like the word choices, vastness is key for me, in how I read it, really has a strong sense of depth here and am a big fan of the way you closed up using the colons as you did. Strong write. Thanks

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  27. lucychiliFebruary 14, 2013 at 4:46 PM

    an emotional journey into the unknown, the shadow is a powerful image.

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  28. Other MaryFebruary 15, 2013 at 1:43 PM

    Thank you Lucy!

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  29. AnonymousMarch 7, 2013 at 11:10 AM

    ...woah. kinda scary, thinking about how dark passions of hunger desire and lust can get wrapped up in the wonder of 'romance'. You explore the themes nicely.

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  30. Other MaryJuly 13, 2014 at 3:29 PM

    Thanks! Sorry I didn't see your comment sooner.

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