I ask you if your love is true
but your response is pending.
I use my phone and email too
in asking if your love is true.
Unlikely reasons saunter through
my mind - excuses never ending.
I ask you if your love is true,
but your response is pending.
The triolet is a short poem of eight lines with only two
rhymes used throughout. The requirements are
straightforward: the first line is repeated in the fourth and seventh lines;
the second line is repeated in the final line; and only the first two end-words
are used to complete the tight rhyme scheme. Thus, the poet writes only five
original lines, giving the triolet a deceptively simple appearance: ABaAabAB,
where capital letters indicate repeated lines. Also, ideally the lines should be iambic tetrameter, but I am rather rusty at this form, and played a bit loose with this. :o)
Perfection is in the eye of the beholder—a "bit loose" works for me in this. The format and rhyme are there, and work really well with the subject choice. And I am ever-so-fond of formatted poetry! I like it, Mary. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI've not tried this form but find myself liking it.
ReplyDeleteAnother inviting style! Excellent.
ReplyDeleteA pending response can go many a way, not many good
ReplyDeleteWell done again, in a form whose repeated lines make writing a coherent poem quite tricky.
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