Saturday, January 15, 2011

The Many Moods of Mary: Body Poems

I have been playing around witht he Rictameter form for awhile now and enjoying it. Here I decided to use the word 'Body' and as I started the poem, I got ideas for others. They are all quite similar, but coujure very different feelings. So, here they are, just a little fun with words:
And a quick review, Rictamenter is a poem with lines consisting of a certain number of syllables per line: 2-4-6-8-10-8-6-4-2 and the first word is the same as the last.

Body - Three Takes


Body
Heat is rising
Beads of sweat are forming
Pulse rate quickens, muscles tense
Ragged breathing builds to a crescendo
Both blood and interest start to drain
As you roll away from
My now useless
Body


Body
Heat is rising
Hearts race and faces flush
Gasping urgently we race on
Frenzied movements build to a crescendo
Gently, dreamily we come back
To ourselves, and savor
One another’s
Body


Body
Heat is rising
Beads of sweat form as my
Heart rate rises, breaths come shallow
Muscles twisting, turning, writhing, pulling
Standing here in this dressing room
As I try to get these
Damn jeans on my
Body

12 comments:

  1. Rictameter form ... my lesson for today. These are wonderful ... I can't choose a favorite ~

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  2. creative, your talent is rocking.
    :)

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  3. Thanks Helen and Jingle! Cheers!

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  4. Fillingahold - Hey thanks - isn't it amazing how a few words difference can really change the tone?

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  5. My first rictamenter - thanks for the inspiration ;)

    Beer
    Bubbles rising
    Beads of sweat run down glass
    Breath is held as liquid descends
    Cool refreshment is absorbed and joy
    Resplendent in after smiles
    The heat is abated
    Gaseous expulsion
    Beer

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  6. Hahahaha -thanks Jbluesboy! Nice sentiments on yours!

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  7. Apparently a Rictameter is a hot poem! (Whew!)

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  8. An excellent triad--amazing what changing a few words can do--and each part enhances the other.

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  9. Hey, thanks Hedgewitch! It is fun to play with those little changes :o)

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