Monday, January 24, 2011

Microfiction Monday #67


I'm trying something new. Microfiction Monday. Write 140 characters or less about a picture that has been posted (although I suppose this is a mirocpoem). This week it's:



He felt as grey inside
as the fog that surrounded
him
as he waited at the bridge
with the anxious child

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14 comments:

  1. AnonymousJanuary 24, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    Very mysterious. I wonder what they were waiting for? :O)

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  2. BubbaJanuary 24, 2011 at 2:15 PM

    There's a good intro... obviously there's differing emotional content between the man and the child as they're waiting for... ? Nicely done, Mary!

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  3. AnonymousJanuary 24, 2011 at 2:17 PM

    I wonder what they were waiting for too...doesn't seem to be something happy, I think...as he felt 'grey inside'....
    Great imagery. Cheers~

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  4. Other MaryJanuary 24, 2011 at 2:29 PM

    Thanks all. Sorry, I'm not allowed to tell what they're waiting for...it's top secret!

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  5. Elizabeth MuellerJanuary 24, 2011 at 4:04 PM

    Poor little child. I hope all will be okay with them. :(

    ♥.•*¨ Elizabeth ¨*•.♥

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  6. Other MaryJanuary 24, 2011 at 4:23 PM

    Hey, thanks Elizabeth!

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  7. anthonynorthJanuary 24, 2011 at 4:38 PM

    Full of mystery. Excellent.

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  8. Other MaryJanuary 24, 2011 at 4:42 PM

    Thank you Anthony!

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  9. PeggyJanuary 24, 2011 at 5:21 PM

    Well written and VEEY mysterious. I also want more! :)

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  10. Other MaryJanuary 24, 2011 at 5:51 PM

    Ah, that's the best complement. Thanks Peggy!

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  11. VickiJanuary 25, 2011 at 11:38 AM

    Sounds like foreshadowing of a poignant tale.

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  12. Other MaryJanuary 25, 2011 at 7:08 PM

    Thanks for stopping by Vicki!

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  13. Grandma's GoulashJanuary 27, 2011 at 12:05 AM

    I'd like to know what they were waiting for. Does top secret mean you'll share that in a longer story someday?

    Hope you'll be joining in more MM.

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  14. Other MaryJanuary 27, 2011 at 10:09 AM

    Thanks Grandma! I'm not sure yet about a longer story about what they're waiting for...as they haven't yet shared that with me! Um...stay tuned I guess.
    I will definately do more MM however, this was fun :o)

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