Monday, January 24, 2011

Microfiction Monday #67


I'm trying something new. Microfiction Monday. Write 140 characters or less about a picture that has been posted (although I suppose this is a mirocpoem). This week it's:



He felt as grey inside
as the fog that surrounded
him
as he waited at the bridge
with the anxious child

15 comments:

  1. Very mysterious. I wonder what they were waiting for? :O)

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  2. There's a good intro... obviously there's differing emotional content between the man and the child as they're waiting for... ? Nicely done, Mary!

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  3. I wonder what they were waiting for too...doesn't seem to be something happy, I think...as he felt 'grey inside'....
    Great imagery. Cheers~

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  4. Thanks all. Sorry, I'm not allowed to tell what they're waiting for...it's top secret!

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  5. Well written and VEEY mysterious. I also want more! :)

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  6. Ah, that's the best complement. Thanks Peggy!

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  7. Sounds like foreshadowing of a poignant tale.

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  8. Thanks for stopping by Vicki!

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  9. I'd like to know what they were waiting for. Does top secret mean you'll share that in a longer story someday?

    Hope you'll be joining in more MM.

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  10. Thanks Grandma! I'm not sure yet about a longer story about what they're waiting for...as they haven't yet shared that with me! Um...stay tuned I guess.
    I will definately do more MM however, this was fun :o)

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