Tuesday, June 14, 2011

Magpie Tales #69


Steps spiral,
infinity curls
at my feet.
Chambered home
echoes of oceans in a
discrete universe

This poem is a form called Shadorma, which is 6-line syllabic poem of Spanish origin with a meter of 3/5/3/3/7/5.



Here is a second brief offering inspired by the prompt by Tess Kincade at Magpie Tales.

Steps
spiral through
translucent, sandy chambers

Infinity curls
back upon itself
to the timeless
center
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18 comments:

  1. HelenaJune 14, 2011 at 11:30 AM

    I'm loving these forms of writes and I love the Shadorma one! I can show off to the kids with them and gain points on Scrabble, too!

    Anyhow Mary, I found your pieces thoroughly enjoyable. I'll look out for you again!
    Lena
    x

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  2. cosmos camiJune 14, 2011 at 11:41 AM

    I love both, but there is a real appeal to that Shadorma. Thank you for expounding on it.

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  3. Brigid O'ConnorJune 14, 2011 at 11:44 AM

    There is something so lovely in your imagery in both pieces, Mary.

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  4. Pat HattJune 14, 2011 at 1:10 PM

    Hmmm now you are hurting my head
    But I like where it lead
    I'm too much of a fool
    To follow such a rule
    And a timeless center really rings true
    Nice writes given by you

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  5. LeslieJune 14, 2011 at 1:58 PM

    i think the first is my favorite... and i really like your use of the word "discrete" with universe. lovely poem.

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  6. Other MaryJune 14, 2011 at 3:16 PM

    Thank you all. I actually had a cut and paste error with the second one. It's corrected now.

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  7. Tess KincaidJune 14, 2011 at 6:22 PM

    Love "infinity curls at my feet".

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  8. Other MaryJune 14, 2011 at 7:50 PM

    Thank you Tess. Great prompt. I really liked yours this week as well.

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  9. Everyday GoddessJune 14, 2011 at 7:52 PM

    a nice treat to read both, and the spiral is a favorite image of mine. nice magpie!

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  10. ~T~June 14, 2011 at 8:50 PM

    The shadorma is an interesting form. Both poems are nice, but I especially like the flow of the second.

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  11. Gerry/Strummed WordsJune 15, 2011 at 8:49 AM

    I like the idea of the spiral curling into infinity. Awesome!

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  12. HelenJune 15, 2011 at 11:03 AM

    Both of your poems are special ... you write beautifully.

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  13. Other MaryJune 15, 2011 at 12:02 PM

    Thank you T - sometimes doing a form poem get my mind going for a free verse piece.
    Gerry - Thanks!
    Helen - Thank you, I appreciate your kind words.

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  14. Lucy WestenraJune 15, 2011 at 12:03 PM

    Very interesting forms, and poems. Thank you.

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  15. Other MaryJune 15, 2011 at 2:09 PM

    Hey, thanks Lucy. Cheers.

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  16. Stafford RayJune 15, 2011 at 3:58 PM

    Mysterious imagery, very satisfying. Is that the poem or the form? I say the poem.

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  17. Other MaryJune 16, 2011 at 7:37 AM

    Stafford - Thanks for that!

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  18. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJune 18, 2011 at 5:20 AM

    tickling words.
    apt magpies.

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