Lovely as a scab,
indecision hangs her head;
broken-toothed smile
drips a bloodied goodbye
in the pocket of yesterday
and you think back, forever
to what almost wasn’t
and wish away
the other
knowing, here in the doorway
any step you take
destroys an infinite number
of possibles -
eggshells break
beneath your blistered feet
This cheery little piece is for Mr. Knowitall's Friday Flash 55, where he prompts us to say our piece in exactly 55 words. Click on the title to go there
Also posted on One Shot Wednesday, One Stop Poetry
any step you take destroys infinite possibilities....yes....true, i like that and great imagery...lovely as a scab...ha
ReplyDeleteCan't fault the consistency--a scab-lovely dark and grim 55--hey they can't all be about rainbows and unicorns. Some really good imagery here.
ReplyDeleteNo way to live a life. I feel these words.
ReplyDeleteI've stepped on many an eggshell in MY day
ReplyDeleteLoved your 55 Mary.
I just Love the way you write.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Fourth of July
Wow, doom and gloom but so well written and such visions you portray. I hope she was able to make omelets before the eggshells were shattered.
ReplyDeleteMary, this is beautiful: I'm not usually one for deep metaphor, but your poem ticks all my boxes.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your visit to my blog, and for your kind comment.
Hey thanks all!
ReplyDeleteBrian - lol, I was torn between 'scab' and 'scar' and decided to choose the ickier one!
Hedgewitch - Thanks, I think I'm due for a unicorn next week ;-)
Monkey Man - Amen brother.
Rnsane - Ha, love the omlette comment. Thanks, and I do lighter stuff too...and love a bit of sarcasm now and then.
Vivinfrance - Thanks so much - and welcome.
G-Man - I appreciate your kind words so much! Thanks for the forum :o)
brutally good..what a strong, vivid 55. (i'm a fan of those poems that go deep, walk dark) ~
ReplyDeleteany step you take
ReplyDeletedestroys an infinite number
of possibles -
eggshells break
beneath your blistered feet
How intense could it get?
Very well composed.. dark n yet with lot of metaphorical word play!
Sunday hugs xox
Yellowhousecafe - Thanks for the kind words. I like my share of dark stuff too, although I try not to take life too seriously.
ReplyDeleteOlivia - Thanks - it's good to 'see' you again!
You are bang on: every step does destroy an infinite number of possibilities - but opens up as many, of which we can only take one, of course. Ah, the roads not taken!
ReplyDeleteThanks Dave, glad you stopped by.
ReplyDeleteLovely as a scab
ReplyDeleteThat was an attention grab
Had to read it after that
Especailly since I got a big one from the cat
And so true too
Infinite possiblities can be destroyed by me and you
scab was the better choice...it made this memorable...still with me on wednesday from friday...
ReplyDeletegreat piece ...perhaps a scab too far ( me and scabs URG ! ) see great imagery too ...thank for sharing
ReplyDeleteBrian - thanks again!
ReplyDeleteKez - I did wonder about that. Thanks for the read.
The last two lines are visceral. You got the desired reaction from me, for swore!
ReplyDeleteAaaarrgghh.. the difficulty that lies in making our choices.. really pointedly expressed here, Mary! Very impressive!
ReplyDeleteHey, thanks Kim and Kavita! Appreciate that you stopped by!
ReplyDeleteScab was the right choice.... Nice!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ayala!
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