The classical symmetry of the #syllables is pleasing and enhances the feeling that the subject/topic is going to come to a good end. I like the way you arranged sounds -- tend/tender/attention, needs/green, and the pair of "I have"s to make the poem feel like a closed little universe.
Hope your hope does not mope Or hope the hope doesn't come to the end of it's rope let the hope go on hoping so there can be hope for the hopeful, at least hopefully.
nice...i hope your hope gets the respect it deserves...as you give it away...smiles.
ReplyDeleteThe classical symmetry of the #syllables is pleasing and enhances the feeling that the subject/topic is going to come to a good end. I like the way you arranged sounds -- tend/tender/attention, needs/green, and the pair of "I have"s to make the poem feel like a closed little universe.
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery! Thanks for this! Hope is indeed tender, and needs to be tended lest it turn into bitter cynicism
ReplyDeleteHope your hope does not mope
ReplyDeleteOr hope the hope doesn't come to the end of it's rope
let the hope go on hoping so there can be hope for the hopeful, at least hopefully.
solid metaphor - nice early morning message
ReplyDeleteLovely metaphor packed full of faith.
ReplyDeleteI like rictameters--fun to write, and in this case, fun to read, with a simple but far from simplistic message.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful in it's brevity and to the point. All the underlying risk-taking is understood.
ReplyDeleteThank you one and all. I have been writing, but not had a lot of time to visit you all. I will thought, promise!
ReplyDeletekeep hoping,
ReplyDeletesmart message well sent.
Thanks Morning!
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