Wednesday, February 15, 2012

Cold Shoulder Trio

1.     
          autumn mist softens
    the bleak forest cathedral:
    visual incense



2.        such beauty in death
    golden, crimson, and umber
    descend as fall leaves



3.      intricate, lacy
   artwork for my window pane
   thank you Mr. Frost

I'm not a haiku master, but I have girded my er..self, and these are my attempt for Grace at IGRT

Images by wallpaperswide.com, thelonggoodbye.wordpress.com, weathersavy.com

27 comments:

  1. Your word images are quite beautiful. The second is my favourite.

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  2. All was grand until Mr. Frost came
    I hate his cold and costly game..haha

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    1. lol, Pat, why on earth do you live so far north then?

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  3. Mary, haiku is not my favorite form of poetry (because I often find that they are a bunch of counted syllables that don't always work together) but I think yours are done well.

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    1. Charlie, I agree. I remember learning haiku in school as a kid as more an exercise in math than writing, thank you.

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  4. Mary! These are all fantastic! You move through the syllable restraints of the form effortlessly! Bravo!

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  5. i really like the frost looking like lace.

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  6. I *totally* love all, esp. "Mr Frost." It's always an extra degree of challenge to choose to work inside a box, particularly a tight box like haiku. But pressure produces diamonds, ala "Mr Frost!" »^.,.^«

    [Here's a somewhat feeble attempt of mine to integrate haiku & contemporary English forms, by using haiku as verses: http://www.knowingfirsthand.info/2011/03/shrike-and-lotus.html]

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  7. Wonderful! I think the images are grand (you know autumn is close to my wretched heart) and your kigo are thrilling. Your second verse contains one extra syllable, and I'm not sure where your kireji lies in the second or third verse, but these are lovely modern haiku!

    Thank you so much for sharing. :)

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    1. Thank you Grace! I pronounced with 2 syllables (incorrectly) oops.

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  8. I love "visual incense" and your haiku are verbal incense, if I might borrow your phrase.
    K

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  9. Beautiful images AND poems. Don't sell your haiku ability short.

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  10. Beautiful, Mary. I am too tired tonight, so just got silly.

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    1. Thanks Sherry! I've been silly the past few days. I'll check out your silliness now, lol.

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  11. these are beautiful, i'm particularly enamored of the first.

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  12. Both haiku and photos are so beautiful, Mary - great combination

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  13. You captured the form well..each one with its own beauty..my favorite is the fall one

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  14. Love the images and words, Mary. The first one is breathtaking !

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  15. These words make nature all the more delicious...great work.

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