Friday, February 10, 2012

Danger: Thin Ice


Danger: Thin Ice
watch your step
too much weight, pressure
may crack the surface

From that central point,
hairline fractures
jaggeding their way out
weaken the cold, slippery crust

It’s dangerous
 breaking through,
plunging into the dark, swirling
so-cold-they-steal-your-breath waters
 beneath

You could be swept away
never finding your way back to the
safer surface

Image by old.ho99.com 

These 55 words are for G-man.  You should click here to see lots more offerings!

26 comments:

  1. I want to be safe so I will avoid the ice
    Or test it out first using furry little mice

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  2. But much of it is actually just artificial impediments. ~Mary

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    1. Are you saying I'm just playing with my mental blocks?

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  3. Good advice for many life situations, too...

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  4. Skating away on the thin ice of a new day....this reminded me of that old Jethro Tull song. I try to avoid ice in any form that requires walking on.

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    1. I almost put that up - it's one of my favorites :o)

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  5. Excellent poem, Mary.
    Re the photo you used: what kind of person would ask a child to go out and pose past the "thin ice" sign? I know it's not your photo, and I can only hope it's been photo-shopped, or that the sign is some sort of unfunny joke. Child endangerment angers me more than most things, so please excuse my rant, it isn't really directed at you.
    K

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    1. Kay - I specifically chose that image because the child makes it even more vulnerable. And rant away, it's a legit cause. I couldn't imagine someone putting child in danger just for a picture; I assumed it was not authentic.

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  6. Mary Bach...
    There seems to be thin ice wherever we turn these days does it not?
    Loved your 55 My Friend
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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    1. Thanks for the forum G. Always enjoy yours as well. Cheers.

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  7. that is def the danger of walk that thin ice....life is rick...

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    1. Like Hedge said about the Jethro Tull song.

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  8. when I was a child, we used to try to walk on a lake which was frozen with ice,

    this is profound,
    perfectly beautiful and thought provoking 55.
    smiles.

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  9. the dangers of going below the surface!

    thanks for finding my blog so I could see Emm'as face and these cool poems. Interesting lay out too!


    Aloha from Waikiki
    Comfort Spiral

    > < } } ( ° >

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    2. You're welcome Cloudia - I'll check out your link. And thanks for 'stopping by.'

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  10. Extended metaphor very well held. Great 55.

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    1. Thanks Doc. Perhaps a bit stale though.

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  11. Well done! You say so much with so few words!

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