When Tess Kincaid provided us with this image of 'Sick Woman' by Jan Steen at The Mag two oddly dissimilar things came to mind. They are (and I'm not proud of this) as follows:
In the immortal words of Robert Palmer:
Doctor, Doctor gimme the news
I got a bad case of lovin’ you.
No pill is gonna cure my ill -
I got a bad case of lovin’ you. And the other was inspired by a quote from Edna St. Vincent Millay, which seems quite fitting as it is featured on the Willow Manor blog.
“You see, I am a poet, and not quite right in the head, darling. It’s only that.”
So with that in mind I came up with this:
The voices are so loud today;
why can’t you hear them too?
They set my skull to vibrating
and pierce my temples through.
Nonplussed, my pulse can scarce push past
the throng that crowds my heart.
The pills you push will not convince
these voices to depart.
Churning, yearning they all want
for me to give them voice,
Bring me my pen and paper, don’t
you see I have no choice?
Nice!!!
ReplyDeleteI love how you combined Robert Palmer and Edna St. Vincent Millay. I often feel I'm not quite right in the head.
Er...yes, quite the stretch. I think we all get that 'not quite right in the head.
DeleteAren't you glad Edna put it in print for us?
Fine rhyme, fine meter = very good.
ReplyDeleteThanks Berowne.
DeleteThe rhyme did flow
ReplyDeleteAnd that ache can grow
But don't stop a toe
And write away at your show
Thanks Pat, you always visit my pad, and that makes me glad.
DeleteSmashing rhyme.
ReplyDeleteMy head feels a bit like that, and nobody else seems to hear these noises.
I enjoyed this.
I get that too Aprille - thank you, glad you liked it.
Delete.. and there we have it! Loved this ...
ReplyDeleteI love the thread you used to weave the poem you made. Pills we push, oh, yes...
ReplyDeleteThank you Irish, yours was good too!
DeleteLove it, the rhyme and the creative inspiration for it! Yes, let those voices speak through a pen!
ReplyDeleteThank you Susie - and thanks for your support on fb.
DeleteA uniquely wonderful response to the prompt photo, Mary.
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Thank you Kay, good to see you here. Cheers!
DeleteReally love this combo..so many special influences, (well, 3) Vibrant, very bright!
ReplyDeleteThank you Lyn, I value your opinion.
ReplyDeleteglad i returned the favor of a visit now - great poem - and what's wrong with quoting Robert Palmer?
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DeleteHey, thanks Don - I'm glad you stopped by too.
ReplyDeleteA sort of medieval prozac , if you like !, how charmng, Mary
ReplyDeleteI like that Ned, the medieval prozac, lol.
DeleteOne must listen to the voices in their head for sure....love this Mary!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Carrie, they sure say nice things to you!
DeleteDon't ever try to stop the voices, Mary.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Doctor.:o)
DeleteLove this :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Ayala :o)
DeleteThis is very good. I love the playful style with a little edge to it. Like- is she really just a little bit crazy? Are we all?
ReplyDeleteMaybe Ken...and who's to say?
DeleteVery fun! I don't think they had meds back then for voices -- they drilled holes in your head or tortured with cold water or racks.
ReplyDeleteMay I share a story, though:
"I hate the medicine -- I can't hear God when I take them."
Said to me by a strange man in a coffee shop at three in the morning during a psychotic rant when I asked him point blank, "Are you still on medications?"
He was arrested the next day for killing both of his parents.
We are lucky when the voices are our friends, eh!
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How chilling. There definitely is a very dark side to this too.
Deleteha this is fun mary...i think all of us poets are a little sick in the head the way we see the world...most times in a good way but dang its haunting when i wont let you go and makes you write...smiles.
ReplyDeleteI sort of joke about it, but of course mental illness is a terrible thing. Thanks Brian.
DeleteI love your two initial inspirations for this...and the poem is so apropos for the painting!
ReplyDeleteBy the way...
UH...UH...ARRGHHH...THE VOICES...OH NO...STOP ME BEFORE I WRITE ANOTHER POEM!
Hahaha - Thanks Timoteo. And, thank goodness that's ALL the voices tell us to do!
DeleteIt's a bit like that...those voices, it's when I don't hear them that I get scared. Lovely write, I didn't even notice the rhyme the first read.
ReplyDeleteThanks - I think not noticing the rhyme is a good thing, right?
DeleteVery lyrical - lightens the subject of the "sickness" but deepens it as well. Easily set to music..the poem rocks!
ReplyDeleteThanks Anny!
DeleteVery well expressed, Mary. Your poem definitely fights back against the image of docile frailty in the pose of the woman in the picture. Paper and pen(or keyboard and screen) are my medication of choice also--thanks for the great preceding quotes as well.
ReplyDeleteThank you Joy, and may I say you're very well medicated!
Deletesmiles...there's no cure against love...and none against poetry as well...luckily..smiles
ReplyDeleteYes, luckily! Thanks Caludia.
DeleteI really like what you did with this picture.he p I definitely understand having no choice.....and the concept of bringing pen and paper.
ReplyDeleteI agree that we poets/would-be poets are a weird bunch which, I think, helps us in our metier.
ReplyDeleteThank you Victoria...sorry I missed you comment earlier.
DeleteA couple of more lines and you could turn this crazily, inspired poem into a bizarre sonnet. The rhyme scheme is perfect! I'm thinking this suggestion fits in with the general theme of joining oddly dissimilar things. This is richly creative Mary. Thank you for sharing. =D
ReplyDeleteThank you Linda, except I would also need two more syllables per line to make a traditional sonnet. I always appreciate your thoughtful comments.
DeleteI know those voices! We should get together and talk about them; that would really show them!
ReplyDeleteLove this poem and the story behind it. Seems like sometimes the voices are boss; the lunatics are running the asylum!
Hahaha - yes, we should get together, that would be an interesting chat! Thanks.
DeleteNicely done - sometimes we need to listen to the voices...
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Agreed; thank you Anna.
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