1.
butterfly eclipse
‘round the rue
moth ‘round the yard light
2.
the moon wanes too soon
when did it
dip into darkness?
3.
inside of my head
it’s snowing
soft, storybook flakes
4.
one small step for man
in the moon
and so it begins
5.
pale grey are the days
in my head
drawing to darkness
6.
sharp, glinting edges
lures us to
eviceration
7.
winter sun sparkles
off the snow
all light but no heat
8.
You are missing from
me like a
sweet amputation
9.
with a short half-life
your love is
radioactive
10.
I hold in my hand
one smooth stone
firm, inscrutable
11.
in the long dark night
of winter
we prepare the ground
12
ask me a one word
question and
I’ll paint your answer
13.
in my pocket seeds
lie waiting
dormant but alive
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and altered the form to fit English with a 5-3-5 syllable count, and omitting
capitalization and end punctuation. There are no requirements on having a
nature theme, the poem may rhyme or not, may use similes or metaphors or any
other poetic device. This and lots more
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inside of my head
ReplyDeleteit’s snowing
soft, storybook flakes....that's the one i fell in love with immediately...ILIKEMUCH...smiles
Thank you Claudia!
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ReplyDeleteYour #2 is ideal. Perfect in form and message. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteThanks Kim :o)
DeleteEnjoyed them all Mary - #7 especially.
ReplyDeleteThank you RoR...I'm feeling the January cold here!
DeleteLovely lunes. I especially like #13!
ReplyDeleteThank you SG!
ReplyDeleteThese are outstanding!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mama Zen :o)
Delete...one... three...four... five... seven... & eleven... were my faves... but 3 was exceptional and one i would like to read back again and again... wonderful offerings... smiles...
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Kelvin!
Deletethree and five take my prize...but all are fantastic! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Natasha!
DeleteIf I have to choose, I'd say #2, #3, #8, #13 are my favourites... Hmmm, that's a lot. Good work on all of them!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, and thanks for the prompt. I did 13 to go with the 13 full moon cycles in a year. Very cool background information, as well as the poetics.
Deletein my pocket seeds
ReplyDeletelie waiting
dormant but alive..love it!
Thanks Ayala :o)
DeleteBeautiful, Mary. I especially like #7 and 11.
ReplyDeleteThank you Laurie.
DeleteI love numbers # 3 and 8, but all are well done Mary ~
ReplyDeleteHappy day to you ~
inside my head its snowing soft story book snowflakes....ah i so love that one mary....you really took to this one...they are all magical....
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian!
DeleteI enjoyed these. Such a variety. I sense you really enjoyed writing them. My favorites are 2, 7, and 12!!
ReplyDeleteThanks Mary. I did like writing these. :o)
DeleteLove those soft, storybook flakes snowing inside the head, and especially 2, 7, 11 and 13. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThank you ds, I appreciate the read.
DeleteThe lune shoots for the moon, enjoyed each one you gave a run.
ReplyDeleteHey, thanks Pat! :o)
ReplyDeleteso hard to pick favorites, but this one just stood out:
ReplyDelete"You are missing from
me like a
sweet amputation"
perfectly worded.
I love the images that you painted in your poem. No. 3 is glued in my head, and number 13 too for the Hope that it conveyed. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you :o)
DeleteThe the images - I can't settle on a favourite - they are all better than the next
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Marousia!
DeleteI love these Mary:-)!!
ReplyDeleteHey Chris thanks. And thanks for reading :o)
DeleteWell done.
ReplyDeleteThe "radioactive love" idea was very unique -- love all that implies
Thank you Sabio!
DeleteCrimson Haired Vixen
ReplyDeleteQueen of Prose
Thy name is Mary
Oooh Galen! Hahahaha - thanks!
ReplyDeleteEach one better than the one before. Excellent!
ReplyDeletenumber nine.. hehe!
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