Friday, January 4, 2013

dVerse Lunes



1.
butterfly eclipse
‘round the rue
moth ‘round the yard light

2.
the moon wanes too soon
when did it
dip into darkness?

3.
inside of my head
it’s snowing
soft, storybook flakes

4.
one small step for man
in the moon
and so it begins

5.
pale grey are the days
in my head
drawing to darkness

6.
sharp, glinting edges
lures us to
eviceration

7.
winter sun sparkles
off the snow
all light but no heat

8.
You are missing from
me like a
sweet amputation

9.
with a short half-life
your love is
radioactive  

10.
I hold in my hand
one smooth stone
firm, inscrutable

11.
in the long dark night
of winter
we prepare the ground

12
ask me a one word
question and
I’ll paint your answer

13.
in my pocket seeds
lie waiting
dormant but alive


The Lune is known as the American haiku.  Robert Kelly, American poet, studied haiku, and altered the form to fit English with a 5-3-5 syllable count, and omitting capitalization and end punctuation. There are no requirements on having a nature theme, the poem may rhyme or not, may use similes or metaphors or any other poetic device.  This and lots more information on and examples of Lunes can be found at dVerse Poets Pub.  Check it out!

44 comments:

  1. inside of my head
    it’s snowing
    soft, storybook flakes....that's the one i fell in love with immediately...ILIKEMUCH...smiles

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  3. Your #2 is ideal. Perfect in form and message. Nice work!

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  4. Enjoyed them all Mary - #7 especially.

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    1. Thank you RoR...I'm feeling the January cold here!

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  5. Lovely lunes. I especially like #13!

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  6. ...one... three...four... five... seven... & eleven... were my faves... but 3 was exceptional and one i would like to read back again and again... wonderful offerings... smiles...

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  7. three and five take my prize...but all are fantastic! :)

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  8. If I have to choose, I'd say #2, #3, #8, #13 are my favourites... Hmmm, that's a lot. Good work on all of them!

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    1. Thank you very much, and thanks for the prompt. I did 13 to go with the 13 full moon cycles in a year. Very cool background information, as well as the poetics.

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  9. in my pocket seeds
    lie waiting
    dormant but alive..love it!

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  10. Beautiful, Mary. I especially like #7 and 11.

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  11. I love numbers # 3 and 8, but all are well done Mary ~

    Happy day to you ~

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  12. inside my head its snowing soft story book snowflakes....ah i so love that one mary....you really took to this one...they are all magical....

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  13. I enjoyed these. Such a variety. I sense you really enjoyed writing them. My favorites are 2, 7, and 12!!

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    1. Thanks Mary. I did like writing these. :o)

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  14. Love those soft, storybook flakes snowing inside the head, and especially 2, 7, 11 and 13. Thank you.

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    1. Thank you ds, I appreciate the read.

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  15. The lune shoots for the moon, enjoyed each one you gave a run.

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  16. so hard to pick favorites, but this one just stood out:
    "You are missing from
    me like a
    sweet amputation"
    perfectly worded.

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  17. I love the images that you painted in your poem. No. 3 is glued in my head, and number 13 too for the Hope that it conveyed. :-)

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  18. The the images - I can't settle on a favourite - they are all better than the next

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    1. Hey Chris thanks. And thanks for reading :o)

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  20. Well done.
    The "radioactive love" idea was very unique -- love all that implies

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  21. Crimson Haired Vixen
    Queen of Prose
    Thy name is Mary

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  22. Each one better than the one before. Excellent!

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