Sunday, October 31, 2010

#239 - Intense, Sunday Scribblings

I had trouble coming up with something for the prompt 'intense.' Guess I was feeling more lacksidasical. I started toying with it first, word-play:
Intense/ In tents/ In tenths/ In tent city
But I think I have finally come up with a rather intense little poem:


Ember eyes burning
Bitter hands clenching

Screaming:
So close
I smell tunafishsandwich
From lunch

Screaming:
So loud
I can’t hear a word

Screaming:
Uncontrollably
The words pour out
I can’t stop

9 comments:

  1. "tunafishsandwich from lunch" - I really like this. I think my kids have this default setting. :)

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  2. Yes, 'tunafishlunch' stood out for me too - it seemed to make the feelings of intensity more real and touching..Jae

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  3. Very intense and I have to agree the tunafishsandwich only intensifies it.

    Elizabeth

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  4. you are right...that is intense
    hope you weren't screaming at your husband

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  5. lol, thanks all. This didn't quite turn out the way I hoped. I wanted it to seem like 'I' was being yelled at in the beginning, and be a surprise when 'I' was the one doing the yelling at the end.
    And to gs batty: No worries, I wasn't screaming at anyone, I don't even eat tunafishsandwiches :o)

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  6. Certainly was intense!Right now I really could eat a tunafishsandwich!

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  7. wow...you cant tell you had any trouble getting started...brilliant;)

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  8. Thanks guys! (and gals, I just always say 'guys' to refer to any group of people, any gender)

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