I had trouble coming up with something for the prompt 'intense.' Guess I was feeling more lacksidasical. I started toying with it first, word-play:
Intense/ In tents/ In tenths/ In tent city
But I think I have finally come up with a rather intense little poem:
Ember eyes burning
Bitter hands clenching
Screaming:
So close
I smell tunafishsandwich
From lunch
Screaming:
So loud
I can’t hear a word
Screaming:
Uncontrollably
The words pour out
I can’t stop
"tunafishsandwich from lunch" - I really like this. I think my kids have this default setting. :)
ReplyDeleteYes, 'tunafishlunch' stood out for me too - it seemed to make the feelings of intensity more real and touching..Jae
ReplyDeleteVery intense and I have to agree the tunafishsandwich only intensifies it.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
you are right...that is intense
ReplyDeletehope you weren't screaming at your husband
lol, thanks all. This didn't quite turn out the way I hoped. I wanted it to seem like 'I' was being yelled at in the beginning, and be a surprise when 'I' was the one doing the yelling at the end.
ReplyDeleteAnd to gs batty: No worries, I wasn't screaming at anyone, I don't even eat tunafishsandwiches :o)
Certainly was intense!Right now I really could eat a tunafishsandwich!
ReplyDeleteYes, intense.. nicely written.
ReplyDeletewow...you cant tell you had any trouble getting started...brilliant;)
ReplyDeleteThanks guys! (and gals, I just always say 'guys' to refer to any group of people, any gender)
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