Tuesday, July 5, 2011

Summer


Above
the Cyclops god
lovely and relentless -
feel her nurturing, scorching
below

Wheat fields
waver, whisper.
Dreaming of bread and beer
they nod their heavy heads towards
the sun

Daylight
loiters too long;
finally cool whispers,
shadows lengthen, deepen into
evening

Cinquain: A five-line stanza of syllabic verse, the successive lines containing two, four, six, eight and two syllables.  This is written for Magpie Tales, a weekly pictoral writing prompt that can be found here:Mag 72

19 comments:

  1. Mary, I really love how you have captured this painting, especially like the second stanza:

    Wheat fields
    waver, whisper
    Dreaming of bread and beer
    they nod their heavy heads towards
    the sun

    The picture you have painted with your words truly does justice to van Gogh's art. Just lovely, my friend.

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  2. 'Cyclops God'! What a fabulous description of , as you say, our scorching sun. Bravo!!

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  3. Ginny - Thanks so much!

    Lena - Thank you!!

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  4. That's really impressive! Love the idea of 'Cyclops God' also xxx

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  5. "Wheat fields waver, whisper...dream of bread and beer..daylight loiters too long." Wonderful images, wonderful personification.

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  6. Nice take on the painting
    One must beat the heat or suffer fainting
    Love the use of loiters too
    Nice one Mary ummm Other Mary err ummm you..haha

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  7. Thank you Sioux, I use personification a lot.

    Pat - I guess it's clear, I like wheat beer ;-)
    Thanks for for taking a squint - your praise is worth a mint. lol

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  8. I love your wheat fields dreaming of bread and beer - a fine poem and a fine magpie!

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  9. Isabel- thanks...I must have been hungry when I wrote it. ;-)

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  10. ...i believe ‘scorching’ is only a two-syllabic word, thus: ‘scor-ching’ should be counted as 2 and not 3... but never mind… we have different approaches and i respect yours besides it doesn’t matter co’z you managed to pull it nicely... and you did give justice t’wards the end of this piece... never heard nor read of a cinquain before and i think it’s nice and interesting... i’d like to try maybe some other future time... thanks for the read.(:

    ~Kelvin

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  11. The imagery is lovely, stunning poem

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  12. Windowlad, you're absolutely right! Thanks!

    Mindlovmisery - Thank you so much.

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  13. I love "dreaming of bread and beer".

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  14. Thanks Tess...I do like to personify.

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  15. Great form, great presentation.
    Always love ur words and sentences/lines
    suck skill and care

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  16. What a lovely poetic form .... your Magpie is perfect.

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  17. So lovely and the cinquain is an interesting form that suits the poem well.

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  18. cinquain. . wow its New to me thanks for that . . . and the words just loved it . . summer unfolded right before my eyes i can relate and feel . Lovely

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