Sunday, November 25, 2012

Fit for a Queen

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The Queen of Chaos sits upon her throne.
She looks out through the window with disdain
at these mere mortals crossing her domain.
The Queen of Chaos sits upon her throne.

She looks out through her window with disdain
then summons churning forces of the dark
to seek out innocents,  and leave her mark.
She looks out through her window with disdain.

She summons churning forces of the dark.
The Queen of Chaos sits upon her throne.
High in her crumbling castle all alone
she summons churning forces of the dark.

The Queen of Chaos sits upon her throne.
She looks out through the window with disdain
at these mere mortals crossing her domain.
The Queen of Chaos sits upon her throne.

Written for The Mag creative writing group.  

This form was created by Robin Skelton, academic, writer, poet and anthologist. It is a Quatrain, and the second line forms a rhyming couplet with the third line and is also used as the first and fourth line of the following stanza. Any number of stanzas can be created this way and the final stanza is a repeat of the first. This gives a rhyme scheme of: A. B. b. A..... B. C. c B…. C. D. d. C .… D. A. a. D...... A. B. b. A.           (capital letters are repeated lines, and small letters are rhymes)







38 comments:

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    1. Thanks ReBelle, this was a tough one for me for some reason.

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  2. the throne does not sound like a fun place to be all alone but then again with her demeanor i wonder if it even registers with her...

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  3. The Queen of Chaos is quite the character.

    Well done.

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  4. Very hard-hearted lady. Small wonder she's alone. But well done with a tricky form.

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    1. Doctor, I do battle with her daily! :o) And thank you.

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  5. tho i have a general "disdain" for refrain or repetition, I found this poem tolerable to the extent of a slow head nod and smile.

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  6. Intriguing take on the prompt - and technically quite remarkable.

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    1. Thank you Berowne...now if only I knew my Gilbert and Sullivan!

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  7. Such a throne she can keep
    Sounds like it's needs run deep

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    1. I agree Pat, bet she doesn't even have a welcome mat!

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  8. ..It really sings... And you said this is a tough one for you yet you managed to make it sound and read like you just wrote it in a snap... Full of ease and smooth flow i so loved to read aloud... Great.. Great...

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    1. Hey thanks Kelvin. I hope you've been well.

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  9. I believe this form is one of the more difficult ... you mastered it beautifully!

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  10. Very good poem Mary!! how has your Muse been?

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  11. lol, She's been MIA! Actually not, the other parts of life have just been a bit crazy. Thanks Chris.

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  12. The repeating lines enhanced the meaning. Very nice poem.

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  13. loving the rhyme scheme of the form. Never come across this one before. It's like a pantoum in rhyming envelope stanzas. great write sis

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    1. Thanks Luke :o) It was a bit of a bugger to start with.

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  14. She is quite the queen indeed.....love the repetition in this Mary.....great writing as always!! :-)

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    1. Thank you Carrie, I appreciate that. :o)

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  15. I like the structure of the poem and the queenly arrogance of the tone. :-) It is very nice read aloud.

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    1. Thank you very much. I was going for regal disdain/arrogance. :o)

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    1. Thank you for reading and commenting Wayne.

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  17. Interesting form...the repetition nails the point...

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    1. Thank you Tess. And as always thanks for the prompt!

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  18. I guess you are heading into that time of year where the queen of chaos does appear !

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    1. I do battle with her almost daily! lol

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  19. Never heard of a Quatrain before, but this was done in excellent fashion. Mary - I'm inspired to try now!

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  20. I wish I could master chess, the way you were able to master this poetic form, Mary. Something about the haughty Queen reminded me of a chess game. Well played, dear lady. I loved the repetition. Thank you for sharing.

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    1. Thank you Linda...I wish I could master chess too. I'm pretty hopeless at it.She does sound something like the queen on a chess board.

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