Monday, November 22, 2010

Then Winter - Poetry Potluck

This is one I wrote some time ago. It's a cold, misty day today, which feels just right for this. I also think it fits, sort of, into the poetry potluck category.

Then Winter

Trees stand cold as iron;
Mist, like tattered souls
Wraps ‘round limbs,
Blows through branches,
Gathers and swirls
Thick in one spot
Above the pond.

From the center rises
A ghost-pale woman,
Hair and eyes grey like smoke.
She whisks off
In a great hurry;
Translucent robes
Stream out behind.
She is bone-cold
And world weary
There is anguish in her eyes -
No ‘rest in peace’ for her.

She is wind,
Blue-grey and icy,
Chasing autumn south,
Making way for winter,
Frost at her heels.
She must rush
Or it will encase her
In a brittle, crystalline statue of herself -

Then winter…winter.


  1. Beautifully written. Very good imagery. She must rush or .... I like the last descriptive phrase especially.

  2. She's probably looking for her long-lost love, Jack Frost. (LOL!) Nice piece, Mary!

  3. love your portrayal of wind...
    dynamic and elegant...
    Thanks for sharing your art with potluck...

    Happy Monday!

  4. Mary Ma'am,
    The advent of winter brilliantly exposed.

  5. I live in a very windy place, cold winds blow....this is perfect. :)

  6. Thank you all. I absolutely love this time of year, autumn, late autumn, and new winter. there is an austere beauty in this time when autumn exits and winter takes her place.

  7. Beautifully mysterious piece. It fits the weather here right now...snow on the ground, winds howling announcing an impending winter storm.

  8. ooooo....very nice! I enjoyed the mystery in this piece and chiller at the end. ....WINTER!!!
    that's enough to make anybody run! lol
    seriously...very good piece. Thank you

    glad I found you on Jingle!

  9. Thank you! Both of you. I appreciate so much!

  10. reads like a play- well done!

  11. she is wind, Blue-grey and icy -nice line. I do enjoy your poetry, Mary

    Warmest Salad

    Luke @ WordSalad

  12. Quite well yearns for the buds of spring!!

  13. A gorgeous personification of winter. Loved it!

  14. Luke - thank you, I value your opinion

    Lyn - thanks. I actually love winter - especially when I'm in front of a warm fire!

    Talon - thank you - I do a lot of personification

  15. Dear Mary Bach
    Beautiful and vivid picturisation.. I enjoyed the winter on her heels...

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  16. "She is wind,
    Blue-grey and icy,
    Chasing autumn south,"

    Beautiful, Mary...these words touched me. Just lovely! :)

  17. Thank you Shashi, I feel so fortunate to live in a place that has these changing seasons, and winter is on our heels right now!

    Eaton - thank you, I find nature to be very moving. I'm glad I could convey a little bit of that here.

  18. week 11 potluck awards/treats 4 u

    Thanks for the beautiful contribution to week 11, hope to see you next Monday!
    Happy Thursday!
    Happy Thanksgiving Holiday if you celebrate!

  19. Thank you Jingle! 'See' your Monday.
    And yes, I do celebrate Thanksgiving, I hope you have a happy one as well (if you celebrate).