Sunday, January 29, 2012

On Love and War


In spite of the
red flag
I give you my
heart

in a bright storm of love

to push back
the edge of darkness,
chaos,
unknowing

Image Red Spot II by W. Kandinsky, 1921

This is provided by Tess Kincaid as a writing prompt for The Mag.  

40 comments:

  1. Your heart looks like an apple
    Does it go good with snapple?

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  2. that first stanza is a wonderful poem in and of itself. well done!

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  3. Beautifully said, Mary. Like Susan, I love the first stanza.
    K

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  4. I like the pause after chaos. And the unknowing.

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  5. brilliant,


    you are getting better and better.

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  6. That's what love seems to be..you captured it...

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  7. Beautiful! Love can be chaotic, but we surge ahead anyway.

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  8. Like this a lot. In spite of the red flag...how often we do things despite just that.

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  9. and that is love...willing to dare that unknowing...knowing it could turn out many different ways...nice mary...

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  10. Indeed, love conquers all - even darkness. :)

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  11. yes, what everyone else said. i love giving hearts.

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  12. Thank you all. I won't make a separate comment to each of you here, but have read and commented on your work at your own blogs. I appreciate your reading and responses.

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  13. And the final stanza is exactly what Kandinsky was doing with his painting, so - brilliant!

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  14. The middle stanza pushed together nicely.

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    1. Thank you, I was pleased with that phrase.

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  15. i wonder how many times we regret rushing in despite the red flag...or how many times we overlook the red flag...interesting interpretation on a frenetic image

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  16. Love the first stanza especially.

    =)

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  17. I give you my heart .. love how that meshes with the red spot!

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  18. Good poem, thanks for it!

    http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com/2012/01/today.html

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    1. Thank you Wander. Nice of you to stop by!

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  19. Pushing back the edge of darkness; that's pretty much what we all do, isn't it?

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    1. Hi Berowne. At least we try to push back the darkness. Thanks for the comment :o)

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  20. The very definition of giving love...terrific!

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  21. Who wouldn't like a bright storm of love? LOL

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    1. Thank you Trell, I do like that phrase.

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  22. wonderful Mary - what happens when the checkered flag falls?

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    1. Oh - then the race is on! lol, thanks Isabel.

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  23. You seem to appreciate, perhaps instinctively, that your commas after "darkness" and "chaos" are a necessary part of the closing cadence. They force pauses which amount - almost - to extra syllables, never mind the subtle changes they bring to the meaning of the lines. Punctuation-free free verse word-sprayers take note.

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    1. Thanks Doc - I tried it with and without, and found I needed the commas. I'm glad you concur.

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    1. Thank you Anna...your spider makes me smile :o)

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