A fixed point
cannot be altered,
but with a wrinkle
of fabric
parallel lines intersect
between you and me
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This is posted at dVerse Poets Poets for their writing prompt about undercurrents.
This is posted at dVerse Poets Poets for their writing prompt about undercurrents.
This one sort of grazes my clavicle.
ReplyDelete~Mary
Um...I hope that's not a bad thing.
DeleteOh wow...this says so much in a few lines...Great stuff!
ReplyDeleteParallel lines intersecting...that plays with my mind. LOL.
ReplyDeletenice...the wrinkle of fabric and the parallel lines... i used to sew a lot when my kids were small...so everything with fabric speaks to me...not always in such passionate ways like yours here...smiles
ReplyDeleteAnd, I used the words 'fabric' and wrinkle' to bring up the undercurrent of time/space as well.
DeleteNow this makes you think... I love it.
ReplyDeletea brilliant observation - I love it!
ReplyDeleteSpace/Time divide! Interweave of life and people, and particular people--that may have a hard time overlapping. This is a lovely image. K.
ReplyDeleteSo short, and yet it packs such a powerful punch. Amazing work. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteWe should always remember that love is non-Euclidean!
ReplyDeleteI love little words that say so much.
ReplyDeleteoh, I love this. a breathless verse filled with undercurrents of so many possible emotions.
ReplyDeletesounds like some funky geometry going on...smiles...def props on the sparseness of words that are still so evocative...read you loud and clear on this one...
ReplyDeleteClever - in the best of all possible ways - beautiful thought.
ReplyDeleteLoved it, Mary. There is something very fluid in the poem, that sort of drives the message--medium is the message, as it were...and a great use of metaphor.
ReplyDeleteso much life in such a short write! very powerful piece!
ReplyDeleteI love this. So few words. So much meaning!
ReplyDeleteThank you all. I won't make an individual comment to each of you here, as this sort of got away from me. I have gone to each of your blogs and read and left a comment on your work thought. Again, thank you - I do appreciate your presence here!
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