Thursday, April 11, 2013

Rock-a-bye


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I dream of babies:
Content, rocking back and forth
I hum soft and low.
Then tenderly looking down
I find my arms are empty.


My daughter's birthday is the 14 of this month, and she graduates the 18th of next month.  I suppose this has something to do with my dream...
The form is a Tanka, which is a poem based on syllables, with the pattern being 5-7-5-7-7. They work best when those final two 7-syllable lines contain a sort of turn or surprise that the first three lines might not wholly anticipate.  This prompt is from NaPoWriMo Day 11.  

9 comments:

  1. Okay, that chair is cool and sort of scaring me at the same time. The poem is lovely and sad. I think you capture the icky sense of loss that can accompany a sweetie-pie growing up. I enjoyed it.

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  2. You have some contrasts going on here. Think the poem has a sweet and melancholy feel, but the image is a bit eerie!

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  3. Oh, they grow so quickly. Be proud of her accomplishments.

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  4. Cool and freaky chair and before you know it they are grown and out of your lair and hair haha

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  5. I need to find a different image for this...thanks all for reinforcing that!

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  6. oy...i feel you...a turning of the page is coming...and that def affects your dreams....

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  7. Babies grow up. Sometimes I wonder if ever again I'll rock one....

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