Monday, April 8, 2013

What If...


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Sometimes I think obsessively
of all the things that could go wrong.
My sense of doom is healthy, strong
it grows and thrives impressively.
Unrestricted, self-convicted,
worrying expressively,
my agonies I just prolong.
Sometimes I think obsessively.


This is a form called an Octain, created by Luke Prater which has a rhyme pattern of A-b-b-a-c/c-a-b-A with each line in iambic tetrameter.  It's linked to IGwRT Open Link Monday and NaPoWriMo Day #8.  

11 comments:

  1. nice...i like the octain....and i think there are many that could relate..in some way we all magnify our troubles letting them overcome our day...

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  2. This is great. I think the rhythm really reflects the content as well, the way it has a fast pace (if you know what I mean).

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  3. Yeah sometimes I obsess to much too, then I just tell myself to shut the heck up(not so nicely) and do what I need to do

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  4. "worrying expressively" ... "sometimes I think obsessively" ... Mary, have you been reading my mail?
    Fabulous write.
    K

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  5. Very nice flow and energy within the form. And a smart examination of something that affects all of us at one time or another.

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  6. Of almost universal application, I would say. Beautifully focussed and compelling.

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  7. I like the way your rhyme scheme gives added emphasis to your words.

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  8. " My sense of doom is healthy, strong
    it grows and thrives impressively..."
    (!)
    and self-convicted--no kidding. I can really relate to this one Mary, and it's very tightly written for maximum impact. Great use of Luke's form, which I've seen many times not used nearly so well.

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  9. I can relate to this..some days are just like this..Nicely done, Mary.

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  10. Thank you all for you comments. I'm both glad and sorry this one resonates with so many of you!

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