Sunday, July 28, 2013

Your Lot

Come
again
to the well.
Take what you need
but go with nothing
except your water jar
and a dipper of kisses,
spilled out, as you start your journey.
Above all, don’t hazard a look back -
you may share the fate of Edith, and me…



This form is an etheree, an unrhymed syllable counting form with the following number of syllables per line: 1/2/3/4/5/6/7/8/9/10.  Joy has challenged us to use this form over in the Imaginary Garden.
I'm also linking to dVerse where Karin has asked us to write about water in some form or other.  
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43 comments:

  1. Brian MillerJuly 28, 2013 at 2:26 PM

    ha. nice word play in the title...so lots wife was edith...then def dont look back...the salt will just make you more thirsty....smiles.

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  2. HelenJuly 28, 2013 at 2:36 PM

    Lisa and I share the same sentiment ... this is beautiful.

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    1. Other MaryJuly 28, 2013 at 7:41 PM

      Helen, thank you so much, and thanks for visiting so regularly!

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  3. christopherJuly 28, 2013 at 2:42 PM

    Yes, a beautiful vignette.

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  4. MarianJuly 28, 2013 at 2:53 PM

    ooohhh, how beautiful.

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  5. HannahJuly 28, 2013 at 4:06 PM

    Very nice, Mary...I really love the phrasing, "don’t hazard a look back" unique and means business...well done!

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    1. Other MaryJuly 28, 2013 at 7:38 PM

      Thank you Hannah, after all, looking back can be dangerous!

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  6. AnonymousJuly 28, 2013 at 4:19 PM

    very clever, the title thrown in as you did - but even without that, I would have thought of him and of her... I like this a lot ;)

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    1. Other MaryJuly 28, 2013 at 7:40 PM

      Lol, thanks! I wasn't sure if most folks would get it or not. I actually had to google her name myself.

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  7. FireblossomJuly 28, 2013 at 4:37 PM

    I'll comment later. Right now I am putting my shoes back on after counting syllables all afternoon in order to write for this!

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  8. Pat HattJuly 28, 2013 at 5:26 PM

    Yeah keeping movin on, no looking back as who know what was dropped in that big litterbox

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  9. AnonymousJuly 28, 2013 at 5:38 PM

    oh, this is beautifully crafted... loved the dipper of kisses... wonderful image.
    ~Miriam

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  10. Katie Mia FrederickJuly 28, 2013 at 5:41 PM

    Hey Love I still can't find your comment that said that is really good advice Love ya anyway your friend

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    1. Other MaryJuly 28, 2013 at 7:37 PM

      Oh, I wonder where that went...and I wonder if I can remember what I said! O.o

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  11. AnonymousJuly 28, 2013 at 5:41 PM

    "A dipper of kisses spilled out" -- quite a lovely line, and sentiment as well. A delight to read ~peace, Jason

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  12. ScarletJuly 28, 2013 at 5:43 PM

    Love the form and message as one starts the journey ~ It may be all we need ~

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  13. AnonymousJuly 28, 2013 at 6:30 PM

    strong writing. I slid into this piece with those first smooth three lines and the rest was quite satisfying.

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  14. hedgewitchJuly 28, 2013 at 6:33 PM

    Ooo, Mary. I love that opening--Come again to the well--just falls perfectly. It's easy to mess up the beginning, but that is perfect. And I love the image of kisses spilling out as someone leaves...the other side of a journey, which is away from as well as to somewhere...so glad you decided to give it a try--you aced it. And I hope your toes are in better shape than Shay's--sounds like she gave them a workout. ;_)

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    1. Other MaryJuly 28, 2013 at 7:35 PM

      Thanks Joy. My muse and I have called a temporary truce, lol. And whatever happened to Shay's toes it's totally worth it - her's is great!

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  15. Other MaryJuly 28, 2013 at 7:42 PM

    Thank you Lisa. :o)

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  16. GraceJuly 28, 2013 at 7:46 PM

    Lovely work on the form and message of starting a journey ~ Water jar and dipper of kisses may be all that we need ~

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  17. OutlawyerJuly 28, 2013 at 9:00 PM

    Well done with the form - so hard to not look back, harder still not to regret! Thanks. K. (http://Manicddaily.wordpress.com)

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  18. GailJuly 28, 2013 at 9:56 PM

    Very enjoyable and smooth.

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  19. ClaudiaJuly 28, 2013 at 11:03 PM

    i never realized that her name was edith...cool...and yeah...better don't look back...cool take mary

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    1. Other MaryJuly 29, 2013 at 8:15 AM

      Thank you Claudia, glad you liked it. I had to look up her name too...I think women's names are too often 'forgotten'. :o)

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  20. Vandana SharmaJuly 28, 2013 at 11:05 PM

    Superbly done.

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  21. Susie ClevengerJuly 29, 2013 at 12:31 AM

    Wow, marvelous piece..Love every word of it!

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  22. AnonymousJuly 29, 2013 at 1:59 AM

    First time reader Other Mary
    A superb etheree
    dipper kisses - gives me tingles down my spine on each read.

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    1. Other MaryJuly 29, 2013 at 8:13 AM

      Thank you so much. I appreciate the visit, and hope you come back!

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  23. Kerry O'ConnorJuly 29, 2013 at 1:31 PM

    There is something quintessentially feminine about drawing water from a well! You have captured that perfectly. Sublime.

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