Friday, July 5, 2013

Road Trip

    Image by cyclingdutchgirl.com

I want to
get in my car
and drive
fast
down a road
I’ve never taken
before.

I want to drive
over the curve

of the world
into the sun
and glance, just once,
in the rear view mirror
at the dust rising
in my wake;

a mushroom cloud
of goodbyes.


This is for Words Count with Mama Zen at the IGRT and for G-man's FF55.  Also posted at Kellie Elmore's FWF.   Click on the links and check them out. 
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35 comments:

  1. Maude LynnJuly 5, 2013 at 9:22 AM

    I really like this. The break between curve and of the world is just perfect.

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    1. Other MaryJuly 5, 2013 at 11:29 AM

      Thanks Mama Z - you gave us a great prompt.

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  2. anthonynorthJuly 5, 2013 at 9:38 AM

    A yearning for freedom. Nice one.

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  3. AnonymousJuly 5, 2013 at 9:48 AM

    You give us a strong sense of the freedom of escape and the mushroom cloud a very powerful metaphor for burning your bridges. That does give, perhaps, a great sense of freedom for a while - strong sense of around the bend! k.

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    1. Other MaryJuly 5, 2013 at 11:31 AM

      Some days are like that, which is when I tend to write. ;-)

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  4. Pat HattJuly 5, 2013 at 10:09 AM

    Just watch out for a cop, he/she may make you stop

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  5. TALONJuly 5, 2013 at 10:43 AM

    Oh, I want to come!! This reminded me of a Jann Arden song...but, age catching up with me, I can't remember the title to save my life! I loved this, Mary!

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    1. Other MaryJuly 5, 2013 at 11:41 AM

      Yes, come with! We can google that song on the way out of town!

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  6. Brian MillerJuly 5, 2013 at 11:08 AM

    kaboom...a mushroom cloud as everything explodes behind you? smiles...i do love a road trip though for sure...

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  7. G-ManJuly 5, 2013 at 11:08 AM

    A full tank of gas.
    A half pack of cigarettes.
    You're wearing sunglasses at night....
    HIT IT!!!!
    (The Blues Brothers)
    Loved your wanderlust 55
    Thanks for playing Mary, I just love it when you are in your Automotive mode...Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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    1. Other MaryJuly 5, 2013 at 11:28 AM

      ...and on a mission from God! Lol, thanks G.

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  8. Sherry Blue SkyJuly 5, 2013 at 11:22 AM

    WOW!!!!!!! I TOTALLY LOVE this! And am about to do that very thing myself. (smiles)

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    1. Other MaryJuly 5, 2013 at 11:40 AM

      Thanks Sherry, and congrats on your going off into the sunset!!!

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  9. HelenJuly 5, 2013 at 11:24 AM

    Mary, this is SOOOOO Thelma & Louise ... love it!!!

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  10. Other MaryJuly 5, 2013 at 11:39 AM

    Come with me Helen, you can be Thelma! ;-)

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  11. Kerry O'ConnorJuly 5, 2013 at 12:34 PM

    I love your poem, especially the sound of these lines, and the little vibe they give me:

    I want to drive
    over the curve

    of the world
    into the sun

    This call to travel to parts unknown is very familiar to me.

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  12. HannahJuly 5, 2013 at 6:42 PM

    Excellent and convincing!! I can say I have felt this pull of the road,too!!

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    1. Other MaryJuly 5, 2013 at 10:55 PM

      Thanks Hannah, there's just something about it that calls to us.

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  13. grapelingJuly 5, 2013 at 11:27 PM

    I say, get in the car, Mary. My sense is the emotion building and then you blow the lid off with the final line. ~ M

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  14. izzyJuly 6, 2013 at 10:20 AM

    Don't drift DRIVE! (my motto of late) nice write !

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  15. Maggie GraceJuly 6, 2013 at 2:36 PM

    Nice rhythm and beautiful wordcrafting!

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  16. TimoteoJuly 6, 2013 at 7:30 PM

    In the meantime you could find some DVDs of the old Route 66 TV series to get you primed. .

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  17. LaTonya BaldwinJuly 7, 2013 at 1:18 PM

    Enjoyed the ride. Smiling broadly and could feel the air on my face.

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  18. scotthastiepoetJuly 9, 2013 at 5:16 AM

    Hi Mary, I know this feeling well and especially love:
    "I want to drive
    over the curve
    of the world
    into the sun..."

    Also reminds me of the young stud character in Twin Peaks, who used to love taking his bike out at night and driving fast into the darkness, without his lights on...
    With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com

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  19. Buddah MoskowitzJuly 9, 2013 at 1:07 PM

    A quick and exciting ride: loved:

    I want to drive
    over the curve

    of the world
    into the sun

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  20. Jannie FunsterJuly 11, 2013 at 4:08 PM

    A mushroom coud of goodbyes, oooooo, love that, Mary Bach. Loving your new look here, and nice to see that pic of you up on the top right

    I want to amble slowly on a banana seat bicycle down new streets.

    And that guy just above is a spammer, which you probably realize.

    xoxo

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    1. Other MaryJuly 12, 2013 at 10:03 AM

      Thanks Jannie. :o)
      And I did delete that comment, thanks. Very annoying, but I hate to resort to the word verification.

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  21. ayalaJuly 11, 2013 at 6:35 PM

    Sound good Mary..take me with you. :)

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