Wednesday, April 17, 2013

Dump-i-ty Dactyl


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Poor…
Hump-i-ty Dump –i-ty
Fell off his rump-ity!

He…
Crashed on the palisade.
All of the cavalcade
(even with Medicaid)
Failed the poor renegade.

Soooo…
Hump-i-ty Dump-i-ty
then very naturally
Starred as eggs scrambled for tea!


Aprille has us trying our hand at dactyls over at IGwRT.  A dactyl has three feet, [dah -de-de ] whereas the iamb [ de-dah] has only two.  Obviously, the double dactyl has two dactyls.  The verse form by that name usually consists of two stanzas often with the name of a person in it.  I played a bit fast and loose with the form, but here is Aprile's easy way to count the syllables, and indicate where the stress should be:

ONE two three ONE two three
ONE two three ONE two three
ONE two three ONE two three
ONE two three DONE

21 comments:

  1. I loved this! Fun and used the form well.

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  2. Nice one!! Of course the, "Medicaid)Failed the poor renegade." Ha!

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  3. What fun! The line about Medicaid is just priceless.

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  4. This is too funny. You have a star in my book for form!

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  5. Very brilliant illustration of the style.

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  6. OK, you win the hysterically funny award today! Great job with (imho) a really difficult form.

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  7. This is a rollicking read! I loved it.

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  8. THanks everyone! I'm not answering comments here, but I am going around and reading all you're lovely dactyls!

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  9. Oh Mary, why did I not think of inserting the -i-???
    when I so wanted humpty dumpty in there. And some brilliant words in there, ending up in the scrambled eggs. Loved it.Thank you for playing along.

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  10. Poor humpty dumpty, first cracked, then eaten and the flushed, quite the life.

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  11. Very cool - nicely done, and to read it is fun.

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  12. This could be a new nursery rhyme! I love anything Alice related! Great job with the dactyls!

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  13. I am smiling, true to form and a lot of fun,,,

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  14. Not only a clever, funny poem, but a political commentary on the state of health care in America, too! Mary, you are a wonder. Amy

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  15. So Perfect! It's an updated version ha ha (more practical)

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  16. This is fabulous, Mary. "all of the cavalcade...failed the poor renegade" is just great!
    K

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  17. Laughing prolifically at the simplicity, galloping dactyl-ly. ;-)

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  18. So fun. Meter scares me, but Aprille's explanation makes it seems easy...another form on my list?

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