There's something about poetry that saves me… ~ Martin Espada
Your heart looks like an appleDoes it go good with snapple?
that first stanza is a wonderful poem in and of itself. well done!
Beautifully said, Mary. Like Susan, I love the first stanza.K
I like the pause after chaos. And the unknowing.
brilliant,you are getting better and better.
That's what love seems to be..you captured it...
Beautiful! Love can be chaotic, but we surge ahead anyway.
Lovely write indeed!JJRod'z
Like this a lot. In spite of the red flag...how often we do things despite just that.
and that is love...willing to dare that unknowing...knowing it could turn out many different ways...nice mary...
Indeed, love conquers all - even darkness. :)
yes, what everyone else said. i love giving hearts.
Thank you all. I won't make a separate comment to each of you here, but have read and commented on your work at your own blogs. I appreciate your reading and responses.
And the final stanza is exactly what Kandinsky was doing with his painting, so - brilliant!
Thank you Dave. I appreciate it.
The middle stanza pushed together nicely.
Thank you, I was pleased with that phrase.
i wonder how many times we regret rushing in despite the red flag...or how many times we overlook the red flag...interesting interpretation on a frenetic image
Love the first stanza especially.=)
I give you my heart .. love how that meshes with the red spot!
Thanks Helen :o)
Good poem, thanks for it!http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com/2012/01/today.html
Thank you Wander. Nice of you to stop by!
Pushing back the edge of darkness; that's pretty much what we all do, isn't it?
Hi Berowne. At least we try to push back the darkness. Thanks for the comment :o)
The very definition of giving love...terrific!
Thank you Lyn!
Who wouldn't like a bright storm of love? LOL
Thank you Trell, I do like that phrase.
wonderful Mary - what happens when the checkered flag falls?
Oh - then the race is on! lol, thanks Isabel.
You seem to appreciate, perhaps instinctively, that your commas after "darkness" and "chaos" are a necessary part of the closing cadence. They force pauses which amount - almost - to extra syllables, never mind the subtle changes they bring to the meaning of the lines. Punctuation-free free verse word-sprayers take note.
Thanks Doc - I tried it with and without, and found I needed the commas. I'm glad you concur.
Thank you Anna...your spider makes me smile :o)
I love love love this!!!